quiet apologies

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Apologia in Free Verse (After Too Much Metre)

 

I meant to speak plainly. To let the thought go unbuttoned, 

leaned against a kitchen chair, talking about traffic 

or the way light hits the linoleum.

 

But then—I rhymed. 

By accident or reflex or loneliness.

 

It was you that made me do it— 

not out of guilt, but because the sentence curled 

toward music, and I didn’t stop it.

 

You rolled your eyes. I apologised. 

And still the phrases rang like pewter spoons.

 

There’s something in me that keeps folding 

speech into couplets, as if silence 

might forgive it easier when dressed in echo.

 

So no—I wasn’t trying to impress you. 

I was just afraid the truth, unmetred, 

might sound too sharp when said aloud.

 

 

 

 

 

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Red Brick Keshner

Fri 27th Jun 2025 01:47

Thanks @David RL Moore 🌷 I can so relate with that awkwardness about rhyme. Being raised and trained to rhyme it was okay until the pushback began from those that were quite militant about eradicating rhyming. So it may be an acquired response to that. More often than not I produce two of the same poem and then decide which gets posted and the other archived: rhymed or unrhymed. 🕊️🙏🏻

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Red Brick Keshner

Fri 27th Jun 2025 01:42

You're absolutely correct, @Ray Miller. That is indeed the actual title. Loving how the dynamic is with you in reference to rhyming poems, yours and others'. Splendid 🌷🙏🏻🕊️

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Ray Miller

Thu 26th Jun 2025 09:22

Apologia in Free Verse (After Too Much Metre) - that should be the title, I think. Not sure why you bring "quiet" into it. Thought unbuttoned - lovely phrase. Speaking for myself, I'm more impressed by my rhyming poems, but tend to find the poems of others more interesting when they don't rhyme.

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David RL Moore

Wed 25th Jun 2025 23:07

Brilliant Poem,

This is a struggle musical poets wrestle with endlessly.

I vomit at my rhyme, often.

The cutting edge of non-conformative unbridled words shears through centuries of pleasurable weaselly obeyance.

I applaud your disregard most heartily.

David RL Moore

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