Off-Key But Still in Tune

Prologue
They met in ways that broke them first,
Each life a thud, a hunger, thirst.
Not born to lead, nor raised to shine,
But time had worn them past their line.
What castaways might find anew—
You'll see, if you read all way through.

The Mule (Once a Builder)
He once laid brick with steady pride,
Now drags his boots from site to site.
His back's a map of breaks and bends,
He buried more than he defends.
He spoke in cracks, in weight, in wear—
They called him Mule. He didn’t care.

The Dog (Once a Cop)
His badge was burned, his service cut,
A whistle blew, the door slammed shut.
They said he barked at all the wrong,
But truth alone won him no song.
Now sleeping near convenience bins,
The Dog still fights, though no one wins.

The Cat (Once a Star)
She sang once, velvet in the smoke,
Till trends moved on and money broke.
Too sharp to beg, too proud to cry,
She claws through gigs that just scrape by.
She purrs when paid, but not for long—
The Cat still owns her right to song.

The Rooster (Once a Preacher)
He shouted fire when fire grew,
But silence paid the warmer pew.
The sermons dried, the donors fled,
His calls for justice left for dead.
Now chalks the truth on alley bricks—
The Rooster’s crow still sometimes sticks.

(Their Journey)
Four soles, not sought, just thrown together,
Not kin, not friends—just beaten weather.
A shack stood crooked in the trees,
They ducked inside with aching knees.
A gang of men had claimed it first,
With stolen booze and deeper thirst.

The Mule kicked open rotted wood,
The Dog bit back as best he could.
The Cat leapt high and hissed with flair,
The Rooster screamed, they dropped their share.
Those men ran blind into the night—
Four misfits laughed beneath the light.

Resolution
They fixed the roof, they swept the floor,
They made that house a kind of "more."
No crowds, no fans, no holy hymn—
Just place to rest when light grew dim.
What failed in them began to bloom—
Off-key, but still in tune.
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Rolph David

Wed 6th Aug 2025 09:32

Thank you and Red for your 🌷!

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Rolph David

Wed 6th Aug 2025 09:31

Good morning, Uilleam,
You have heard about this very German fairy tale of the Brothers Grimm in England? I didn’t know it was known beyond the German borders, like Perrault’s fairy tales.
And to answer your question: yes, it is Scottish Gaelic. It is my personal coat of arms and my motto. The wolf and the crescent moon represent the origin and meaning of my name.

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Uilleam Ó Ceallaigh

Tue 5th Aug 2025 16:20

The Town Musicians of Bremen - that's it! I think that memory's from school! Lord I feel old😏

Is that Scottish Gaelic on your profile picture?

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Rolph David

Tue 5th Aug 2025 15:07

P.S.:
And I think you did remember it, in a way — the whole piece is loosely inspired by the tale of the Town Musicians of Bremen.
Four outcasts, past their prime, thrown together by chance and finding unexpected strength in each other.
That might be the echo that’s been ringing in your mind.

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Rolph David

Tue 5th Aug 2025 15:05

Thanks, Uilleam — really glad the title landed with you!
And I love that you heard a fable in it — that’s exactly the note I was hoping might hum in the background.
"Key of F all" made me laugh out loud — exactly! Off-key, but playing something.
As you said: if we’re in tune with each other, we’re halfway there.
And now that you've said it, I think I know the echo — Steinbeck maybe? Or Orwell with a kinder pen?
Thanks again for reading. 🙏
Cheerio,
Rolph

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Uilleam Ó Ceallaigh

Tue 5th Aug 2025 12:41

It's just occurred to me, Rolph your poem strikes me as being very fable or parable-like; it reminds me of something which I can't bring to mind.

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Uilleam Ó Ceallaigh

Tue 5th Aug 2025 11:57

I love that title, Rolph.

They sing in the key of F all - or, as we say in Lancashire - "bugger all"!
a recipe for disharmony.

As long as we're in tune with each other.
"The People united will never be defeated".😉

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