<Deleted User> (13762)
Wed 21st Feb 2018 08:02
CPD Suki - Compulsive Poetry Disorder - we just can't help ourselves!
Comment is about Crimewatch Verses Spartacus ~ Blame Russia (blog)
Original item by Suki Spangles
<Deleted User> (16860)
Wed 21st Feb 2018 02:51
We tend to only hear the woman’s story, this needs to be said.
Comment is about #Me Too (blog)
Original item by Louis Audet
some very vivid and effective imagery here Martin
Comment is about Hidden treasure (blog)
Original item by Martin Elder
hey thank you both. I know David I've been kind of stuck on the night poems for awhile now... I was thinking I need to have a change and write some 'day poems' but it just dosen't come naturally. thanks for the kind words though- always very encouraging.
Comment is about 4am (blog)
Original item by Tom Harding
This was an absolutely stunning poem and I was overwhelmed with the pain and love and sorrow and tragedy all at once throughout this piece. It hits close to home as my friend went through this, I plan to read more of your work.
Comment is about To the Man I Once Called Daddy (blog)
Original item by invisible
Hi there folks,
Cheers so much for all your comments and feedback, and your time. I sometimes wonder what the heck I'm doing writing/sharing this stuff. Well, we all need a hobby!
Suki
Comment is about Crimewatch Verses Spartacus ~ Blame Russia (blog)
Original item by Suki Spangles
<Deleted User> (13762)
Tue 20th Feb 2018 19:58
each verse is almost a little poem in itself. I liked the 'glamour' verse the most - it reminded me of those great actors and singers who found fame in Hollywood. Their rags to riches stories are truly incredible. Dorothy Squires was born (in her parents' carnival caravan) in the village just down the hill from me. A small but worthy claim to fame. Thanks for posting. Col.
Comment is about Mostly Welsh (blog)
Original item by Chris Armstrong
yes Greg, I suppose it must be.
A new day. Well, in a new season, a new year certainly, in these I can appreciate the new batch, the next year's batch, but the turnaround of days I find I am inclined to think of as my own. Okay, I can keep up. Thanks!
& perhaps this raises MC's point on sacrifice, that it is right not to look East, again, at someone else's sun.
Comment is about 'Who has the courage to look out to the east again at someone else's sun?' (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Tue 20th Feb 2018 18:23
Thank you Pat that is indeed a complement , coming from someone who’s poetry I admire.
All the best des
Comment is about Red Window (blog)
Original item by DESMOND CHILDS
<Deleted User> (18118)
Tue 20th Feb 2018 16:44
hanks so much for your recent comments on my poems.
Much appreciated.
Hannah
Comment is about 220August (poet profile)
Original item by 220August
<Deleted User> (18118)
Tue 20th Feb 2018 16:37
Beautiful poem. Wonderful lines :
'Maybe, love is for poets, to be portrayed in art.'
Thank you for your comments on my poems too.
Hannah
Comment is about A walk in the garden with Juliet (How many Romeos have you killed?) (blog)
Original item by 220August
The inspiration for this comes from thinking about a world where human reproduction is (at certain levels) perversion and violence towards humans is entertainment (at certain levels). We guard or daughters from being sexually exploited while we place our young boys in front of violent video games and inspire them to war, as if death or mutilation is not as bad as sexual exploitation.
Comment is about Choices (blog)
Original item by 220August
Ray - serious or not, you made a pertinent comment about the atmosphere of previously occupied homes.
During my formative years in the West Country, my parents
moved house approx. 20 times and there were certainly
some of the homes that had an "atmosphere" - mostly
good as I can happily recall. But none was a new build.
Martin makes a good point about the lack of focal points -
(like a shop, post office, pub or community hall) in new
developments...highlighted in a very recent peak time TV documentary about housing and planning in Oxfordshire by
those who had bought there. They seemed like bolt-holes
for commuters to the big city!
But enough from me. Thanks again for the poem.
Comment is about DISTANT VIEWS (blog)
Original item by ray pool
<Deleted User> (17799)
Tue 20th Feb 2018 12:00
A riveting poem, with a beautiful flow - I feel compelled to know more about the supernatural. It is a very interesting perspective too!
Comment is about RESTLESS SOULS (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Enjoyed hearing you read this last night at Write Out Loud Woking, Ray.
Comment is about FIRST JOBS IN THE GARDEN (blog)
Original item by ray pool
I agree with all the comments; lovely, gentle stuff, Ray.
Comment is about FIRST JOBS IN THE GARDEN (blog)
Original item by ray pool
<Deleted User> (13762)
Tue 20th Feb 2018 09:03
an epic mind at play - constantly active and questioning, always pushing at the boundaries and never content to sit back and accept the written norm. Yet there are also nods and winks and acknowledgements of the great sagas from history. Your poems imo make for a great response to those early writers. The Homer of Edmonton? Okay, maybe that's taking the compliments a bit too far! Well done on POTW.
Comment is about 'Sea-faring' by Zach Dafoe is Write Out Loud's Poem of the Week (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
I took that last line as about ageing, and mortality, Dom.
Comment is about 'Who has the courage to look out to the east again at someone else's sun?' (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Thank you Pat, Ray for the kind words! Very much appreciated.
Comment is about Middle Child (blog)
Original item by Eric Maynard
Tue 20th Feb 2018 05:49
Hi Pat, I’m glad you like my poem. Thanks for the comments, I find them very encouraging.
Hope the weather has improve over there for you. Still a bit dismal over here.
All the best des
Comment is about Red Window (blog)
Original item by DESMOND CHILDS
hi there Ray,
Humorous and wistful. The last verse is lovely.
Suki
Comment is about FIRST JOBS IN THE GARDEN (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Bring on Joni Mitchell Martin and pave paradise. Interestingly I wonder if some just can't face "second hand " homes, or previously occupied ones. I had such a bad atmosphere in mine from the last occupiers that I had to bless the place. I just got all that bad feeling and told it to piss off. Damn it, come to think of it, my wife wasn't even a virgin when we got married! I'll get my coat.
Ray
Comment is about DISTANT VIEWS (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Thanks Martin. Yes, I rely on my wife for fine tuning; anyway there is no point in feigned supremacy. Those naughty plants always get their way in the end.! Sadly too she is limited by arthritis so I do my best in the labouring department.
A welcome comment indeed Stu, thanks mate.
David, as always you swept aside the no entry sign on my brain. I was thinking of doing a poem on calling out names in a school register; might still do one! Yes, they are like a family with all their nurturing requirements. You old romantic you. I must get out more often.
Ruby, Col. nice to have your likes.
Best to all. Ray
Comment is about FIRST JOBS IN THE GARDEN (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Liked no.3 the best....
Comment is about ameriKKKan trilogy version 2.0 (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
I don't get the last line, I'll have to give it a think, but I like that Julian, the poem does seem to be speaking directly to me. okay Kosmicki, watch that man.
Comment is about 'Who has the courage to look out to the east again at someone else's sun?' (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Hi Martin . Thanks for commenting on The Totter from Toulouse. I'm glad you thought it resembled Edward Lear, as that was what i was aiming for. I was feeling low when i wrote it, so i did it to cheer myself up.
Cheers Kevin
Comment is about Martin Elder (poet profile)
Original item by Martin Elder
Stu many thanks for comment on Ted Crow & I'll keep an eye out for this Max Porter. Dom
Comment is about Stuart Buck (poet profile)
Original item by Stuart Buck
We were all new once Freddie. Just go for it!
Comment is about I'm new (blog)
Original item by Freddie Jacob
Hi John,
Thanks for you comment. Much appreciated as always.
Keith
Comment is about An Orderly Woman (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
zach this is just wonderful and a more than fitting winner. i have always loved your writing, the way it mixes styles and your use of striking visuals, so i am really glad to see you up here where you belong. thanks for the sout-out too, it made me happier than most would realise.
Comment is about 'Sea-faring' by Zach Dafoe is Write Out Loud's Poem of the Week (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
nice imagery martin and i love 'creak and crack' i can smell the leather and hear the groan of the hinges
Comment is about Hidden treasure (blog)
Original item by Martin Elder
lovely stuff ray, you use the garden and its need for care as a metaphor very well
Comment is about FIRST JOBS IN THE GARDEN (blog)
Original item by ray pool
such a wonderful writer
Comment is about Crimewatch Verses Spartacus ~ Blame Russia (blog)
Original item by Suki Spangles
<Deleted User> (13762)
Mon 19th Feb 2018 08:02
Blimey mate you pack so much into each line and force our soggy old brains to go into overdrive contemplating each image as they tumble one upon the next I'm fair exhausted by the final line. All if which means I'm utterly impressed of course. Hope your week is a good one. Col.
Comment is about Crimewatch Verses Spartacus ~ Blame Russia (blog)
Original item by Suki Spangles
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Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Hi Keith
A beautiful tribute to your Grandmother. Me Mum and Dad had a similar way of cleaning etc. Tuesdays for this room, Wednesdays for the washing and drying.
It's such a realistic and touching portrait ( esp the last stanza), that I felt as if I was walking with this wonderful lady through her routines and her life.
Beautiful mate
Jon
Comment is about An Orderly Woman (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Thankfully there are still some parts of the UK that have not yet been built on. But you are right Ray there are far too many cars around usually filled up with people wanting to make an impression and going no where in particular. the world and his dog seem to all have to be car owners.
But where young people get the cash to buy a house or flat now days is a wonder to me.
however when great new estates of housing are built there is no thought at providing the accompanying infu-structure. Sometimes I do feel like an old man bemoaning the fact that is not like it was in my day. But I guess that may well be the way it will always be until we run out of space to accommodate buildings and cars!
Rant over
good poem
Ray
Comment is about DISTANT VIEWS (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Gosh is it really that time already to start working on the garden. Ours looks like a bomb site after all the wind we have experienced blowing across it of late. I love the way you refer to your wife as the headmistress. She clearly takes a firm hand with regard to the garden.
Nice one Ray
Comment is about FIRST JOBS IN THE GARDEN (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Excellent. sadly this is all too real in portraying the way that some men view women.
very well written drawing the reader in to believe that you are talking about a woman until the last punch line
Nice one
Comment is about damaged goods (blog)
Original item by Natalie Rupik
Is this ok for an analogy Suki - a mangled block of metal that was a car and all the life it contained, but no room for looking out of the window! I see so many images and all slipping in and out of focus, under a technicolour spotlight. Wonderful writing , challenging, shifting phantasms of ideas, always glorious fare. I will take a slice of this larded cake and consume, to disappear in soapbubbles.
Ray
Comment is about Crimewatch Verses Spartacus ~ Blame Russia (blog)
Original item by Suki Spangles
I concur completely her Tommy, it can be a minefield at times. I just love writing
Nice one
Comment is about Wandering Expositions (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
A fantastic series of poems Ian. Particularly love the music version. Sadly there are so many in America who believe that it is their God given and constitutional right to carry guns. Those who would no doubt make the same argument for nuclear weapons.
Nice one
Comment is about ameriKKKan trilogy version 2.0 (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
Wow Suki this certainly some poem. There is a lot of great description coupled with quite a jaundiced and multi layered look at ,modern day living. There is acres of dazzling description here.
Love it
Comment is about Crimewatch Verses Spartacus ~ Blame Russia (blog)
Original item by Suki Spangles
Ray - by all means "dignify" my comments and I'll keep commenting. I am fiercely opposed to the loss of our
precious countryside and the excuses offered for its
rapidly increasing momentum, hence my own recollections
in response to your pithy poem. End of story.
Cheers
MC
Comment is about DISTANT VIEWS (blog)
Original item by ray pool
HI Suki. A rock and a hard place. I know"quantitive easing" certainly put land buying money in the hands of speculation bankers. They always squeeze our balls, don't they?
Thanks Kevin. Ironically some of the old workers' cottages built for the mines and railway navvies are now worth good money. Trouble is where you get new communities, you have cars in abundance = environment issues plus costs of new railways considerable. Watch this space. I threw in the hymn idea as I think we need help from somehow more celestial.
Thanks Mark. Had to smile at "briefly!." I'll try to dignify your comment as best I can. I easily bought my house in 1979 as a freelance musician (1 year work living at parents gave me the £2000 deposit.) My dad in the legal business said stick to ownership without the lumber of service charges. The estate agents/solicitors/lenders linkup was always an unholy alliance. Disbursements always creamed off first. It is still a minefield with people suffering delays and bullshit. I got my loan from a B.Society. In medieval times land ownership was in few hands, but at least livings were assured and food provided however humble. The black death put paid to that, reducing cheap labour. After the death throes of heavy industry and on the back of social deprivation, it seemed to coincide with increased immigration, within a deliberate political policy. It did Enoch no good to highlight it.
Nothing in society stays the same, and us old'uns will have to get used to it, as our predecessors did in their day. Social diversity can of course be a good thing when prejudices are fought out in the open, forcing give and take on all sides. I hope I presented a few views, and don't want to get bogged down with spinoff arguments!
Thanks so much for hitting the like button, Col, Adam, Charlotte, Pat and Brian.
Ray
Love to all you lot.
Comment is about DISTANT VIEWS (blog)
Original item by ray pool
David Taylor-Jones
Wed 21st Feb 2018 08:34
Lovely poem Chris, I really enjoyed the rhythm and the sentiment, ?
Comment is about Mostly Welsh (blog)
Original item by Chris Armstrong