This is a love poem in its 'truest' sense - so I'm guessing there is probably no name to offer LOL
Very much of what we read on here is in my opinion lust fuelled - and there is nothing wrong with that - it is just of a different ilk.
Someone on here once said to me 'lust is good for us, love is a minefield...' and that is reflected in so much of what we read.
In my opinion lust and love go hand in glove but love transcends lust. I can see precious few living examples of it when I look around. Never having known that blissful state myself - I'm only conjecturing that it in fact exists.
I love the fact that the love in this poem sees beyond age and physical faults. Its subject is not trussed up in a Cinderella frock or a basque and suspenders - they are just flesh and blood, riding the storm. A beautiful poem.

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loving the carousing swallows and hunger of the cliff.

total trust is potent, if bottled 100% proof of love.

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Sorry - in your head doesn't count Graham! Get those hips gyratin' now!

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"before disfigurement makes mockery

Of the beauty that ‘we’ are,

I am begging questions of the architects

That still remain unanswered; – dropping

To an unforgiving floor"

my fave part.
the architects of life is an exciting metaphor. Gods and Architects, this faulty design Mike, but why faulty, why weeds take hold in pavement cracks and not pretty flowers? Perhaps they do and we cant see them. This imperfect nature. Cruelty and beauty sit side by side

always a pain in your writing and always a catharsis for me

thanks

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I dance in my head every day Ann.

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Hello Ms Foxglove! Yes, being an obsessive imaginer and vegan (oh but I sometimes sneak the occasional organic milk yoghurt/organic full milk tapioca pudding!) means I'm in a perpetual state of horror. I was thinking to rectify this by taking a course in taxidermy. Arghhhhhhh!

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I really enjoyed this poem, it was full of feelings about things we all have opinions on. I could careless for tabloids and whom ever is in them.At times while in line, Ill read the front page of one and feel sad for the people within.This poem shows your person is just full of your care.That poor girl, she is pretty in a fake way, and has no real her or real love ever.she is plastic.you can almost make out the silicone ball in the breast.

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This very well observed and loving . Good well written as usual

Augusta xx

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How lovely Anne, IYou have a pretty voice... it must be all the salt air.

Augusta xx

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Ta again Val fof commen-tea-ing on my poem..tee..hee!thanks lovely Lady!...Stef-x

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My dreams are reality, my mind my stage so theres no room for failure there its just sometimes a tragedy...tho always a comedy when I see you x
This touches on the reality that jesus represents to us every sorrow and every woe, every last burden since this dawn of time. the weight of all, beyond any we'd ever comprehend. like the deepest ocean upon our heads.
Mossad would have had him tortured.
The saddest is that its all perpetuated in fighting with ghosts and images of religion. A cowards battle as any could slay a spectre. And has nothing to do with Jesus as a sacrificial lamb, an archetype of let blood martydom given in the honour of alleviating our pain. And now people continue to give him a hard time, calling him a silly bastard and me for loving ALL the very essence of him as beautiful.
When greatest love of all is sacrifice .
ah well.
i think youre right about being admitted.did you mean committed? I once visited a loony bin and there was a man there with a big beard sitting in the corner smiling. Very odd. you know Im sure it was a ginger one too ;)

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Hi Cynthia,
I hope the poem, hope all my poems can stand without knowing any background. Of the people who commented only one knows much about me, and I think she was the only one who knew beforehand that I'm about to go in to hospital again, and am a bit uptight about that.
It wasn't intended as a 'chat' thing, and nor is all my work so autobiographically personal. I welcome comments of any kind - particularly nice ones, and I always appreciate yours very much - good or bad!
Cx

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Cheers Jonboy!

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thank you, i take it your speaking about jesus being in hamas? I was hoping somebody would say something so i could have the oppurtunity to explain. Jesus was a freedom fighter in his own right, he knew his preaching episodes were causing civil unrest in a region then dominated by the roman empire and yet continued. Today that is what western propaganda media would call a "terrorist" if he were to come back and witness the israeli tyranny of imperialism imposed on the innocent people of palestine there is no doubt in my mind he would join hamas. Afterall it is his home country.

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This is bitingly funny, tripping along its marvellous diction and carousing rhythm like a tu'penny rant. Do you ever write when you are 'high'? Or maybe, 'high' goes in a totally different direction from chemical stimulation. I can think of several 'other ways'.

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A huge theme, Kealan, huge. You have made some splendid points; for me, maybe a bit murky with relational ideas in spots, but compelling in concept. Way to go!

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Good afternoon Val-my thanks to you taking time to read 'Oh my Father'and kindly commenting.Am very grateful.My best regards to you-Stefan-x

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Thanks Val
xxx

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Thanks for your comments Cynthia
Cx

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really like these pics stevie. you are good at taking them when the subjects unaware! thats a good one of john togher and the one of louise....hope you saw the one i got of your groovy legs that night on facebook. thanks x

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Thanks
xxx

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Hi Alison, maybe we are distant cousins - my grandfather came from Perth. Best wishes, Dave

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Beautiful imagery - best wishes, Dave

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"For in black I find you pure
A most forgiving colour
In ample flesh there is allure
Every curve and fold a finger tours
Warming hand upon the scores I draw along your spine
Smilingly internal, confident you are mine."
Brilliant Pete as usual. Celebrities :-(

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Good writing Jane it captures the era well.

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Well done Emma,I get the picture.
A 21st century nervous breakdown.

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Yes - I could do with meeting him - he sounds like he could cope well with chaos - though he might not like the contents of my fridge.I like this one Emma. Lots of good lines in it. 'He hates the words, modules and schedules and meetings' is music to my ears - the antithesis of someone I once knew!

I also like the image of age as an oversized shoe...

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Hi Cynthia

'YES'

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Re Blackthorn (mine's a pint!) Oh! You saw me coming back from the beach then did you Gus? Thanks for listening! xx

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Oh! You saw me coming back from the beach then did you Gus? xx

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hey this is great...except the humour is wry and I think its all tinged in sadness. Its brilliant. x

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Hi Ann I think as a song it possibly needs a bridge or reprise of some kind.

Her hair it was golden

Her teeth they were green

I didn't know of her going

But I knew where'd she'd been

....with a hey hey .....dah dah

Nice when the old ditties buzz about ya...

Nice voice...

Gus xx

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This is based on a memory of a scene in a French film from years ago. Isabelle Hupert played an innocent girl who went walking with her boyfriend. He asked if she trusted him. He tied a scarf over her eyes and they walked to a cliff edge. He said "take three steps to the left, two steps forward" etc. Went on for ages! She didn't know how close she was to falling. It was a wonderful scene. He had her in his power I guess, but didn't let her fall. Whatever was the film called? (Answers on a postcard please!)

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Really Grate John...


Loved it what a twat well done!!

Gus

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My attempt at an english folk song! I was singing it on my way home from the beach and the blackthorn looked so lovely along the hedgerows. But when I got home I couldn't seem to "get" it back quite! Hey (nonny nonny) ho! Shirley & Dolly Collins anyone? They were brill! (Unlike me!)

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Really fine poem, Ray. Wise and warm and perfectly formed

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I think this is fabulous, both written and spoken.

We all have those memories we'd rather forget, but this looks back on them with humour! S xx

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love is so precious, so fragile isn't it?

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very funny, thanks!

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Hi Wytchewoode, thankyou for reading my election poem! I have now had time to look at your site and listen to the audio. I have read your poetry before but not commented. However I have enjoyed its fine quality such that I dont particularly want to single one out. Vry enjoyable. I agree with you about labels too. Best, jane

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" carcassess ground to mince" as a comment is a great line! Many thanks for your encouragement and comments.
Flashback is wonderful, I think you know I love the vivid pictures. If you stood for election on a the green card with poetical speeches like these you would have my vote. best jane

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Hi Cynthia - intrigued by your question. On the whole my poems are quite simple. I don't think I have a problem with what you mention. More a frustration that subject can get more attention thatn poem. xx

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Welcome to WOL Liz, be good to read some more of your work on here.

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Intriguing! I really like the "mysticism of Wednesdays" verse especially. Sounds like an interesting guy! xx

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As usual, I love your stuff. Passion portrayed in a prosaic way (I'll have to look that word up! But I know what I mean!) xx

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Cynthia, this first draft would benefit form some abridgement and yes some stanzas would be good. Im quite happy witht the core concept and theres some couplets I love in here like (Shadow/Hiroshima)

Idea wise it wanders a little but with a tight thread, it all poured out exact as you read it which how i usally work, ideally I would have a manager to proof read and edit my work. thank you for your comments which I respect x

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Hiya, I'm based in Manchester, yes. Thank you for your lovely comment!

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It is good, Pete. Is it possible to break the lines into parts/stanzas? I felt a bit overwhelmed, squashed by the tight print for a longer poem. I'm only asking.

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hey,

i love your poems-just been looking at your blog- and your voice has a nice timbre too. are you based in the north-west?

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Very good, Jane. I needed time to read it properly. The tone is set with the 'rushing' first line and is then maintained with vivid imagery and supportive diction. 'dessicated community' is really strong, like so many carcasses ground to mince, all cohesive personality gone.

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