Thanks for reading David. It really tested me to capture the stuff. Apparently mercury was used as a cure for syphilis in the Victorian times and led to terrible complications. I often wonder if there might have been a link between this and Jack the Ripper - not an impossible scenario.
Cheers Ray
Comment is about A BAROMETER FALLS (blog)
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Thanks Greg. I sweated over the metre and chopped it about, because as you know you can ruin a poem if it doesn't feel good. I have noted your astute comment and a very fine point you make. I have altered it and I think this gives still a slight sense of us being the puppets of the masters as it were!
The tragedy of the collision was on all the minds of us at the time . On another occasion the police dropped us off at Wapping where the River fleet is based. Apparently there was a colossal number of suicides in the river during that time, the late 80s.
More musical stuff to come. Appreciate your reading.
Comment is about SHIP'S MUSICIAN (blog)
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Nice one Harry - Spoken like a true Caesar
Comment is about A valentine for Cleopatara (blog)
Original item by Harry O`N eill
This may be emotional striptease.
Is the subject trying to overplease the reader.
Does it mean that the layers are false and the reader is unaware of the facade?
Thought provoking.
Well done with this new stream of work Alexandra.
Comment is about Layers (blog)
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Well it seems you've started believing JC!
If we can stick it up the Arse, I think we could do it.
Good to hear Hurrikane! I don't think Bob D will sue you, I've heard he's a Spur too!
Comment is about HURRI-KANE (blog)
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Nice one John - I remember 61 lol. I was just 6 and saw the victory bus. Come on you Spurs :-D
Comment is about HURRI-KANE (blog)
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Some great poetic music in this as well as the songs, Ray; the Silver Barracuda and Ry Cooder, for instance. Important details, such as Wapping new stairs. I wondered about "Thatcher's spawn" ... is that too spelt out, do you need it with the yuppies and the ad-men as well? Just a thought. For me, the Marchioness and the Bowbelle are the brooding presences lurking in the darkness behind all this.
Comment is about SHIP'S MUSICIAN (blog)
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Indeed Wolfie - we write therefore we err (occasionally!) Thanks for commenting xx
Comment is about Humans & Poets (blog)
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Hi Jim Glad ytou liked the sax poem!
Comment is about Jim Trott (poet profile)
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Hi Greg Thanks for appreciation of Wolfram, although I'm not quite sure if I've got it right yet. I have been tinkering with it quite a bit.Not sure I need to drag Ted in at the beginning, but then rhythm goes to pot when i take him out. I'll have to let it mull a while!
Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)
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Hi Greg Thanks for appreciation of Wolfram, although I'm not quite sure if I've got it right yet. I havcce been tinkering with it q
Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)
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I agree totally. I distance myself as much as possible and try to be a critical friend to my own poetical alter ego! I do find it a bit surreal though and most of the time can't quite believe I come out with the things I do. It's like its been written by someone else.
I don't think it's narcissism. All creatives have to be a little self indulgent to get the words onto paper, but most (and I include myself in this - are a little in denial of or play down their passion......)
I would love to have the confidence to join a writing group, but this forum is perfect as I can engage and not worry about facing anyone in "reality" : ) wouldn't you agree?
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
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Secrets and graves - now that does appeal to my goth nature...
Comment is about Nigel Astell (poet profile)
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this has a very nice cadence, and a certain dignity
Comment is about (blog)
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Thanks for all the comments guys! Really appreciate it
Comment is about Blood Knot (blog)
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Hi Vicki Glad you liked my warrior!
Comment is about Pixievic (poet profile)
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Hi Ray Glad you liked my warrior!
Comment is about ray pool (poet profile)
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Thank you Rob - that's a lovely comment!! Xx
Comment is about Somewhere (blog)
Original item by Pixievic
so pleased you liked this David as it needs a calm mind to get into it. I was inspired into it by a bit of telepathy and trying to describe that, and how it might seem in a poetic context.
Cheers Ray
Comment is about THOUGHT FORMS (blog)
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Haha!! That's ok I'm aiming to be privately funded by a rich old man!!
Comment is about Humans & Poets (blog)
Original item by Pixievic
Gulp. You'll never get an Art's council grant with that attitude Vicki - Tracey Emin has cornered the market.
Comment is about Humans & Poets (blog)
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Thanks for that John
We have all become part of a project that has highlighted our very own hearts of Stockport.
Comment is about Unpicked-Restitched Exhibition (blog)
Original item by Stockport WoL
The theme of the changes in life - whether in mind or body
- or both: captured for us to consider, each to his/her own.
Comment is about 'The older we get the stranger my husband becomes' (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Vivid! One of the elemental forces readily available to us
in whatever place we happen to be at the time - but there
is that comforting "close the door" that allows us to shut
it out when seeking refuge.
I recall being high on a bare Scottish Highland hillside when
one of those dry storms - with looming pink skies and
distant drums of thunder - seemed likely to materialise
overhead. Quickly placing my backpack down, I moved
away and made myself as small as possible for someone
of 6'4". Thankfully, the conditions improved around me
and I was able to go on my way...with a muttered
prayer of thanks.
Comment is about Storm (blog)
Original item by Trevor Alexander
Alexandra - just found your work and I'm impressed. I will read through your pieces on here and promise to leave comments, constructive criticism and collected thoughts where appropriate.
Rob
Comment is about Alexandra K. Parapadakis (poet profile)
Original item by Alexandra K. Parapadakis
Alexandra - I avoid reading the established hierarchy of dead and dying poets as I refuse to have my work influenced by unrealistic romanticism. I like your dig at accepted convention. Keep it going.
Rob
Comment is about Writing 'proper' poetry (blog)
Original item by Alexandra K. Parapadakis
Alexandra - who is this raptorous female, and when can I meet her? Love your use of the darker traits in your work.
Rob
Comment is about Grisly Girl (blog)
Original item by Alexandra K. Parapadakis
Alexandra - strangely compelling piece. Read it and read it again for maximum impact. Love it.
Rob
Comment is about Blood Knot (blog)
Original item by Alexandra K. Parapadakis
freckled in a shellshocked fading sunlight
colouring in the sky two lines in between stations does it for me - - - again well read mate on Monday night!
Comment is about Inbetween Stations with David Bowie (blog)
Original item by Andy N
Vicki -I am picturing Victorian ladies in crinolines and lace,
bosoms heaving and faces blushing behind fans. Ladies on the lookout for a gentleman of their dreams. This piece has a feel of the romantic poets of old. Very nice Vicki.
Rob
Comment is about Somewhere (blog)
Original item by Pixievic
Eric - I am currently watching a box set on Sky called Aquarius. Its broadly about the Charles Manson era and the settings and characters are reflected in your piece. Not sure your intention was a hippy trip back to the sixties, but it has that feel. Very well done sir!
Rob
Comment is about Isla Vista (blog)
Original item by Eric Broke
Thanks Stu, appreciate the comment.
I'm still playing about with the ending on this (not something I usually do, but not quite happy with it)
Comment is about Census Report (blog)
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That is a poem in itself Mr C! Thanks xx
Comment is about Somewhere (blog)
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<Deleted User> (13762)
Sat 13th Feb 2016 12:25
yep - I like this too - the title caught my attention because I'd written a short story about a guy who drove from Isla Vista to Denver Colorado - reading this made me take a look at some of your other work which I also enjoyed. Thanks.
Comment is about Isla Vista (blog)
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<Deleted User> (6895)
Sat 13th Feb 2016 11:14
A plug? You mean a news item, of course, David! Of course we're usually interested in a new publishing venture, especially with such a Larkinesque name. Do keep us posted.
Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)
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Hi Greg. Good to hear from you again & Hi Ray Thanks for encouraging comments about 'Manganese'. In passing I am soon going to be launchuing my new online journal and publishing venture The High Window along with co-editor Anthony Costello. I'll be in touch again in case you want to give it a plug. Might need a poem or two in due course as well!
Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)
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Hi Harry Thanks for encouraging comments about 'Manganese'.
Comment is about Harry O`N eill (poet profile)
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Hi Ray Thanks for encouraging comments about 'Manganese'.
Comment is about ray pool (poet profile)
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Fri 12th Feb 2016 19:27
nevertheless Nicole it is still very readable as a poem too.Thank you.Jemima.
Comment is about Take it Back (blog)
Original item by Nicole
Fri 12th Feb 2016 19:19
right up my street Daisy! Thank you.Jemima.
Comment is about Black Lines (blog)
Original item by Daisy Lancaster
Sometimes my poems are more like song lyrics. This is one of those times
Comment is about Take it Back (blog)
Original item by Nicole
Capturing the imaginations of the young is worth the
effort and poetry - cannily chosen - is a primary example
of what can be achieved. There are numerous examples
that can catch the attention of inquisitive open minds.
Properly "taught" they can trigger the desire to learn by
heart.
Some - like Sassoon's "The General" and Houseman's
"Blue Remembered Hills" - have qualities best suited
to the concept/process but there are numerous other
examples that could work towards a lifelong love of
poetry and appreciation of its value in enhancing the human condition across the generations.
Comment is about 'Taking the poem inside you': pupils battle it out for place in Poetry By Heart finals (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
I had that on my list but being bitten made me think of the horse and the fact that when time comes to retire and it is tired of fighting the horse is put out to graze!
Comment is about February 2016 Collage Poem (blog)
Original item by Stockport WoL
Hi Joan
You're welcome. Be my guest :)
If those poems are demanding that loudly to be heard, I think you'd better let them! ;)
Comment is about Shall I compare thee to a selfie stick? Dos and don'ts of first-person poetry (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Thank you Jemima, Martin and Colin, I loved your feedback. Have a great weekend. Anna x
Comment is about I can't take my eyes off those silver boots (blog)
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John Coopey
Mon 15th Feb 2016 00:58
Dare to believe, Graham. We've still got Man U, Liverpool, Chelsea, and the Arse to contend with yet, 2 at home and 2 away.
Only a nipper, Tom. I'd have been 9.
Thanks for the comments, guys.
Comment is about HURRI-KANE (blog)
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