Hi Cynthia, how are you? Wish I could say that I was in possession of a beautiful baby girl, but still waiting,. Feel Like I have been pregnant for 10years now and not the mere 10months that it is. I can't even write at the moment, everything is hormonal dribble, or hot air - ha, I am like a ballon that is ready to pop!- I am reasonably well though, if worn out and a mere shadow of my former self!! I am hoping that Kara Fe (fe with an accent over the 'e') Burrows should be here very shortly, and then at least I can get back to normal, even if general life will be upturned again. Once again, hope you and yours are well and will keep you informed. We have had some really bad viruses in thr computer and when it is working doesn't help me at the minute that it is in the attic bedroom,I need my laptop back. Take care, nicky xx
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Ain't that the truth.
Well done.
Cx
Comment is about withdrawal (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
Thanks Ray. I will definitely have a think about the 'heartbeat' comment, you may be onto something there. The separation of 'staring' is a nod to the mersey poets who are particular favourites of mine, it's not meant as a surprise as such, just to draw your eye back to it to accentuate the meaning of the word. A cheap trick, but I like it. Glad you like though and thanks again for your very constructive comments. Much appreciated, Nash
Comment is about Consulting the Auricle (blog)
Original item by Nash
Hello Nash. Like the title, "Your surveillance equipment" is clever and "Dust colliding"is sublime, well, the whole of that verse is pretty good. Wonder if you could finish on heartbeat, final verse isn't adding that much, I don't think.Do you mean to separate "star" and "ing"? There's enough surprises without that. Good poem.
Comment is about Consulting the Auricle (blog)
Original item by Nash
Oh, sorry! Forgot about a kiss
for you to remember me and miss. lol
Comment is about Our life (blog)
Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska
You are certainly kidding,
Feeding me with compliments
which sound like the fragments
of gentleman's judgments.
Comment is about Our life (blog)
Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska
<Deleted User> (6895)
Mon 10th May 2010 19:50
Good evening Larisa-lovely poem-but!-lovelier smile! best regards-Stefan-x
Comment is about Our life (blog)
Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska
<Deleted User> (7075)
Mon 10th May 2010 19:06
I do, I do, I do, I do! I enjoy this site very much. Thank you.
Comment is about Larisa Rzhepishevska (poet profile)
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<Deleted User> (7075)
Mon 10th May 2010 18:39
Hi there Larisa, Welcome to WOL... hope you enjoy the site. Winston
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<Deleted User> (7075)
Mon 10th May 2010 18:32
Hi Nash, welcome to WOL. Good to see you posting blogs and taking part. Lots to descover on here once you start looking. Winston
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Original item by Nash
Rachel Bond
Mon 10th May 2010 18:10
did you notice the daemon i captured on Frankie's shoulder...?
Comment is about Eclectricity, Bolton March 2010 (photo)
Hi Andy - its in the heading - friday 21st May - think i sent you invite on f-book too hope you can make it, cheers Jeff
Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)
Original item by Andy N
Very good,I like this, well written.
Comment is about Third Person Omniscient (blog)
Original item by Kealan Coady
To return the compliment...If I could have written that when I was 21, i'd have been very smug about it. Awesome!
Comment is about Third Person Omniscient (blog)
Original item by Kealan Coady
May be we should get together Augusta!
Comment is about a stan laurel kind of day (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
I like this one - though it has taken me a few readings to appreciate it.
I like the thoughts behind it and your way of expressing them.
Comment is about Goring A Guru (blog)
Yes - I like this one too. It is fresh and understated. I like the comtemplative nature of it.
Comment is about Germinate (blog)
Original item by Max Wallis
This is absolutely brilliant, from the first word to the last.
Comment is about Panchajanya (blog)
Original item by Nash
<Deleted User> (6292)
Mon 10th May 2010 11:48
I having a fat Oliver sort of day...
Augusta xx
Comment is about a stan laurel kind of day (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
No, it's me in the photo (see top of poem)! Aren't I cute!! Can't get the hanng of these bow ties though!
Comment is about a stan laurel kind of day (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
knowing you, cynthia - the idea behind this could be taken about four different ways - lol.. but it's certainly interesting and quite different from your other stuff (well some off it).
if i am honest - i am not wild about the last two lines 'oh, oh / cruel light' as possibly cutting it off before that may make it sharper and to the point (lol) x
Comment is about Bedroom Games (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
makes me think off hugo williams's stuff a bit here, georgina - i really enjoyed this.. the last stanza is a nice change in pace totally x
Comment is about Another. (blog)
beauitful, beauitful.. brought a lump to my throat totally..
Comment is about Love's cooling light (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
Very evocative, I like this a lot. Especially for some reason the jars warming in the sun, I can smell the turps!! (And that is not a habit of mine - though it is a lovely smell!) x
Comment is about British Summer Time (blog)
Original item by Tom
nice use of the bold bits, phil.. still going through your play too - had a lot on m8 but will be in touch soon..
Comment is about Would society find me, if I was not there (blog)
Original item by Phil Golding
Really beautifully read, and seeing your elfin face reading gave it a delicate haunting quality.
Comment is about When the Wind Sighs - Video Recital (blog)
Original item by Max Wallis
While there is a valid planning issue here, the issue is more ethnic than planning.
No offense is intended to decent British and English folk, the poem is written in anger and aimed at the old Tory imperial element that looks down on all those not British.
Incidently, under a law of James I, the Roma are the personal property of the Queen a are the swan of the lake, and to harm them is to damage the Royal property, a law brought in to protect Romanys in a bygone age...
It has never been repealed!
Idiotic planning laws forced on ordinary people should be resisted, but dont use Romanys as a scapegoat. Normal folk should suppor their "use" of the loopholes in the law to develop as they see fit their own homes, and spend as much time and effort in blockading the council who stop ordinary people adapting their homes as they do a gypsy camping on a field bought with their own cash.
Comment is about Hatred in the Heart of Olde England (blog)
Original item by Tomás Ó Cárthaigh
Thanks for your comment Lynn. I agree with you about the election. Brave of you to write so topically. I have tried this but I get disheartened when I can't keep to the subject.
All the best.
Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Hi Lynn and welcome to Write Out Loud! Enjoyed your recession poem!Some true stuff in there about the origins of our financial woes!
Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)
Original item by Lynn Dye
I really love this poem. This was the first I read when I joined this site last week, and has encouraged me to try new styles.
Comment is about flashback (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Love your poems, Freda, especially PUPPY.
Comment is about Freda Davis (poet profile)
Original item by Freda Davis
Tu me fais toujours rire Isobel - chin chin ; )
Left my shoe behind as I rushed to catch the bus. As I watch the traffic flow past, my world is coloured with thoughts of you. I pour my heart out into a mocha and wait... You elude my charm, you enchant and fascinate, you tease and torment, you are always there... my ever elusive love.
Comment is about That's what I call creative! (article)
I enjoyed listening to you Max...
I take the sibilances to reflect the wind sighing. Your very slight voice variations, along with your chosen words, create a bit of a disturbed and hypnotic state.
Comment is about When the Wind Sighs - Video Recital (blog)
Original item by Max Wallis
<Deleted User> (8159)
Sun 9th May 2010 20:52
thanx for commenting me! Russian proverbs are fun...actually i though it was English one. :-)
Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)
Original item by Andy N
In that case - use it! Vary the pitch, tone etc ... make it a performance - trust me, I do know what I'm talking about here. :)
Cx
Comment is about When the Wind Sighs - Video Recital (blog)
Original item by Max Wallis
Chris I do know what you mean but also it's deliberate. The poem's more about the softer sibilances than 'z's.
Comment is about When the Wind Sighs - Video Recital (blog)
Original item by Max Wallis
Beautiful voice Max, just watch the sibilance on certain words ending in s ... sighs, exercise ... unless the sibilance is deliberate (and if it is - use it - strengthen it - and vary it, to add interest) try saying sighz, exercize etc instead - it sounds better in performance - play with it a bit, you should be able to hear what I mean. Well done though.
Cx
Comment is about When the Wind Sighs - Video Recital (blog)
Original item by Max Wallis
Very enjoyable and great fun this, Ann, even without the video. But who is the mysterious lady that appears in the middle of it ... is it Mrs L?
Comment is about a stan laurel kind of day (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
Sun 9th May 2010 20:03
A unique perspective of an obviously driven man. Wonderfully written and very touching.
Yolande
Comment is about The Night Worker (blog)
Original item by Cate
<Deleted User> (6895)
Sun 9th May 2010 19:13
wifey says you are very clever Ann!she,s been listening to this-again and again! thank you-Stefan.
Comment is about a stan laurel kind of day (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
<Deleted User> (7904)
Sun 9th May 2010 18:21
I like the layout of the poem - the hesitancy and repetition, the sense of things being linked but not connected - which ties in to the failure to make a connection the poem is about. Something I'm not sure about is the anachronistic quality of some of the lines, which almost seem to me like translations of another work which have been sampled into this poem. I don't think they take anything away from the poem but I'm not sure what they add.
Overall I do like it though, and the central exchange of the last verse - the woman made to take the dominant part (I assume) answering 'kindly' that they're still 'in role' even though she doesn't like it - has a great deal of depth and says a lot about both fetishy relationships and more supposedly 'normal' ones.
Comment is about Bedroom Games (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Cate, this is brilliant. Your empathy and your objectivity with the whole situation makes it a heartbreaker. The construction is really good, with rhyme and rhythm carrying the details of the poem emotionally along to its philosophical ending.
Comment is about The Night Worker (blog)
Original item by Cate
Andy N
Tue 11th May 2010 08:11
good stuff, kealan.. the ending is particularly clever - i think you build to this really, really well..
Comment is about Third Person Omniscient (blog)
Original item by Kealan Coady