Purely from your seemingly deliberate choice of words and their phonaesthetic quality, you have highlighted how an awareness of the difference between a voiceless velar consonant <music> <thick> is contrasive with the sounds of <smoothly> <compelling> etc.

This is great.

The phrase 'pleasureable anticipation' however, is then made to 'sound' like it's riding over cobbles in a wonky wheeled shopping trolly.

'in the (a) pleasure of anticipation' (?) has more in common with the smoothness of the other words in use toward the end of the piece.

I enjoyed it - it stopped me watching Match of the Day.

Comment is about It's Easy to Believe (blog)

SCRATCHITTI

The toys have visited
Going cap cap cap like the OCDs they misruly are

Decisions are backjumps
They’re landfill in the lungs
Make one, break one, they’re neither heaven nor slam
Sh1t no,
You can commit them like stickers

Me, I was
Almost all city queen till, buff,
my gallery gets massacred
Holler props to the anti-hat for that.

Sunlight registered on the Mohs scale of mineral hardness
When I went racking for cannons

Restocked on potential,
I baled a soft rose/ bombed an epiphany –
Which was this:
All Nature is grafflage

So, me, I leaned into a wall till my face was a throw up
& went legal

Comment is about Take Two... (article)

I like this one Stella - it is so very sensual and you performed it beautifully at the Bards.

Comment is about It's Easy to Believe (blog)

I like this one Ann. You use a simple little childhood trick to weave such a tale. It catches you cos deep down I guess we all want to think we are special. To find out you aren't - just another bod - can be the most hurtful thing of all.

Comment is about butter (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Really liked this one Stella

Comment is about Watching Kumar Work (blog)

Powerful. I think you should consider re-posting it near Nov 11th

Comment is about Poppy Picking Day (blog)

Original item by stephen smith

I love Weeping Willows...

This is very sad, and I was not expecting such a tragic ending.

Comment is about Weeping Willow (blog)

A lovely idea Val and beautifully executed. I think it could do with extending by one verse though - nudge,nudge,wink, wink
x

Comment is about A Eulogy To Poets at WOL (blog)

Original item by Valerie Cook

No - It's bollocks.

Comment is about A study in balls (blog)

Original item by Dave Carr

A lot of the imagery in this poem is sailing right over my head cos I know nothing about sport, much as I love balls. I didn't even get the fat balls until Ann explained it to me. I'd love to say your poem is bollocks but it sounds rather good and funny, very very funny.

Comment is about A study in balls (blog)

Original item by Dave Carr

You've been to the Howcroft then?

sorry. I thought it was funny. :-)

(I'm one of the crowd there so i do include myself here. How bad is that? Even felt the need to explain my comment) doh!

Comment is about 20 Years from Now (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Doesn't take much does it!

Enjoyed the audio and it isn't low on my pc. :-)

Comment is about the innocent cliffs (blog)

Original item by chris dommett

The path you were walking down was exactly the path I was walking down! All the lines I wrote were exactly what I wish for including the last line. And you didn't upset me in any way, I was truly just confused. Thanks so much for commenting on my work. And also, your description of "The Cape" was a great response to what the piece is about. I'm glad it had that effect on the reader. Thanks again.

Lisa

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

I like this, Steven, the theme, and many of the ideas, and also the repetition of the beginning and ending. I do think you 'speak' too much here, that the poem might be condensed by the equivalence of a whole verse without loss of meaning, and an increase of power.

Comment is about Unspoken (blog)

Original item by Steven Kenny

Certainly a good twist to a rollicking, 'tongue in cheek' ride of rhyme and rhythm.

Comment is about 20 Years from Now (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Heart-warming and encouraging.

Comment is about The Cape (blog)

Original item by Lisa Milligan

The idea here is not to become frustrated... but to merely have fun with what you see!
No one (I hope..) is judging, but 'interested' to see what the mind can find from glancing at the photos!

... there's blood on my face, please hand me a rose to wipe the sins from my fore....
..oh and on the topic one's nose does not appreciate such an embrace - please hang me some place empty of people; full with words, disarmed yet bright.
Then sing me a song a five-pence not six and be sure to make HIM dance, if HE is to see the reality of my now, petal stained fod.

(I chose free-writing)

x

Comment is about Take Two... (article)

Many thanks John, still feeling my feet in this world so reassurance that I've made a start is lovely!

Comment is about Alison Smiles (poet profile)

Original item by Alison Smiles

A little like what is happening in my town, though I am pleased to say that here it is on a lesser scale.

Very poignant stuff. I really like it.

S xx

Comment is about Goodbye Central Library (blog)

Original item by Andy N

This is definitely dark. Chilling and scary

Comment is about sampler (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Two Fingers

Hey, Graffiti Exchange Rate:
how many daubs to the doodle or dribbles to the spurt?
How much quantum to the chromatic sub atomic tag?
Me, I took my spraycan palette to the Broadway ticket office,
Knocked on the glass divide like the Spectre of the Rose I am,
Twisted a pink jet into the cashier's face
And hosed her till she was cockeyed indistinguishable,
For which she gave me tickets to the show.
At its conclusion I
Went onto the street where Pigment was manifest and bold,
Imagined the room inside the spraycan cooked up to bodyheat,
Saw the savage sepia genie inside
Attempting to snap the feed tube, the one
Drawing colour from the well into the nozzle.
Of course I had to stop him or lose the shade,
So I shook him till his body splattered into spectra.
His infrared face and chrome yellow conversation loitered
Till I tampered with his breath.
Two Fingers did it.


Hatta. Early morning off-the-cuff spieling. Back to bed, now, with a cup of tea!

Comment is about Take Two... (article)

Mmmm this is quite sad, and I would call it a dark poem, despite what others may say.
Love TC XX

Comment is about sampler (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Thank you Paul,

glad you enjoyed it :)

Comment is about Fatima AL Matar (poet profile)

Original item by Fatima AL Matar

Wow, Alison.
Powerful imagery.
I really like the rhythm too, and the sense of anticipation of rhyme which sometimes comes and sometimes doesn't.

Comment is about Alison Smiles (poet profile)

Original item by Alison Smiles

Dave
I thought I'd the monopoly on writing a loada balls!
Very good - keep posting.

Comment is about A study in balls (blog)

Original item by Dave Carr

the audio is very quiet so turn up your speakers to listen

Comment is about the innocent cliffs (blog)

Original item by chris dommett

Hello Kathryn,Tis a nice poem, especially the final two lines and the 2nd verse. Corner bound, centre bound should be hyphenated?

Comment is about White lillies. (blog)

Oh yes, you just all go ahead and chortle away, but it's no joke having a stalker as lean and hungry as Kate Moss.

Comment is about A Model Husband (blog)

Football - the beautiful game.
I take it Ann that you are not an afficianado (football, rugby or cricket). I'll save my poem about the offside rule for another time.

Comment is about A study in balls (blog)

Original item by Dave Carr

A lovely poem Kathryn. And so full of hope!

Comment is about White lillies. (blog)

I think this is beautiful. I can certainly relate to an awful ot of it and know that the feeling that none of that matters to them is a wonderful one, it makes everything pale in significance. Nicely done x

Comment is about The Cape (blog)

Original item by Lisa Milligan

Hi Fatima,
just heard your interview on Tony Stringfellow's show - excellent, well done¬!

Comment is about Fatima AL Matar (poet profile)

Original item by Fatima AL Matar

Greg, thanks very much for your comments on Fame of a Sort. I've just read your Dance On poem. That has a killer last line too!I don't suppose The Shadows were Rock'n'Roll, really. I liked the strolling forwards then back and the intellectual smile. They did look rather nerdy.

Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)

Original item by Greg Freeman

The "fat-balls thing" is the only bit I DO get!!! Little birdies in the garden eat fat balls. And they don't like football either! (As far as I know . . . ) Forgive me, but is it football or rugby of which you speak?

Comment is about A study in balls (blog)

Original item by Dave Carr

Loved it, football + poetry = ecstasy.I have to admit, I don't get the fat balls thing. You could maybe have done summat with dropped balls.

Comment is about A study in balls (blog)

Original item by Dave Carr

I'm sure you're looking forward to the World Cup, Ann! Great football poem, Dave. But what about the sad end of goldenballs?

Comment is about A study in balls (blog)

Original item by Dave Carr

Thank you for your comments on "Heartfire" and for letting me know what lines you liked best. I truly feel that way myself.

Lisa

Comment is about Dave Dunn (poet profile)

Original item by Dave Dunn

Thank you so much for your comments on "Though The Demons Are Waiting" - very much appreciated!

Lisa

Comment is about Dave Bradley (poet profile)

Original item by Dave Bradley

The bleedin' football season never finishes does it?

Comment is about A study in balls (blog)

Original item by Dave Carr

Hold on. The football season hasn't finished yet.

Comment is about A study in balls (blog)

Original item by Dave Carr

This is such a lovely poem and so moving. Brings back some sad memories for me too of the pain my dad went through but also some good ones. It really is excellent the way you have gone about this.

Comment is about The Colour of Death Is Gold (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

You have a great voice and a lovely accent. I sometimes found the music too distracting though, esp in the final poem, which was my favourite. I just listened to it again, and it is a really beautiful poem and reading. I don't think it needs the music, and I think you should have the words printed on the posting if you could face doing it.

Comment is about More video poems for you to enjoy... (blog)

Original item by Tomás Ó Cárthaigh

Excellent!
I love it.

Comment is about A Model Husband (blog)

Hmmmm the cricket season has begun already?

Comment is about A study in balls (blog)

Original item by Dave Carr

Quite entertaining...
This made me laugh ; )

Comment is about A Model Husband (blog)

Yes I think I should get me one ha ha.... save on dishwasher tablets hee hee ;-))
love TC XX

Comment is about be witched (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Oh yes and then there was aunt Clara too.
Why did she marry him?
Well... it's obvious the man absolutely adores her and loves her twitchy little nose. :-)
As good a reason as any i would think.
xx

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Quite right too!! (I esp like the last verse - really made me chortle, and I don't often chortle!)

Comment is about A Model Husband (blog)

Ah.... but its the good days that make the bad days bearable. Poor you if you forget them all!
Cate xx

Comment is about Selective (blog)

Original item by Kealan Coady

Hey, thanks for your comment. I like "I like ruins best" the best :)

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove