Malcolm Saunders

Sun 16th Dec 2007 19:01

HB Mox. Half Baked. Half baked pencils are really crumbly and do horrid miracles.

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clarissa mckone

Sun 16th Dec 2007 17:14

Hi Phil, is this a true story?Seems part of It i read about in the news.People dont understand how good they really have it, compaired to the homeless.bless you this Christmas, the poems very nice

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Mia Darlone

Sun 16th Dec 2007 14:40

Thanks for your comment Pete, at least I don't totally die on my arse on paper! Well done at the slam by the way.
Your poetry is much more cleverer than what mine is, my mother still says to me 'I wish you'd speak proper like what I do'.

Fellow writing addict Darlone.

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Nick Cable

Sun 16th Dec 2007 14:34

Beautiful!
I feel warmed as if sitting too close to the fire myself.

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Sun 16th Dec 2007 11:51

So God used to be a pencil? Wow. Function, ergonomics... and traces could be erased. How were the shavings regarded? Relic status or slough? Was he soft or hard or perfectly HB?

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Malcolm Saunders

Sat 15th Dec 2007 19:38

Thank you Pete and Clarissa. Your comments are greatly appreciated.

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clarissa mckone

Sat 15th Dec 2007 18:59

Malcom this is wonderful !

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clarissa mckone

Sat 15th Dec 2007 18:55

we sure did all pay for it.you know if we abolish the income tax here, and its illegal anyway/does not follow the constitution, then I wont have to pay for wars Im against.I have always loved this poem.

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Pete Crompton

Sat 15th Dec 2007 17:25

Thank you Clarissa and Darren. Darren yes I totally agree, I have put the 'a' in as you could even say 'apart' 'a part' so i like the duel aspect. Thanks so much for spotting this.

Pete

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darren thomas

Sat 15th Dec 2007 14:10

Your talent is obvious with every single word.
"I have become part of your pain" ?
"I have become a part of your pain" ?
I would be tempted to add an 'a' ...but then will that change the whole initial meaning? Ooh, I don't know.
Great Poem Pete.

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Pete Crompton

Sat 15th Dec 2007 12:07

superb.sophisticated.clean.simple yet complex.

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clarissa mckone

Sat 15th Dec 2007 00:58

It a nice poem flows very well. Im sure yall will be fine. happy holidays
xx clarissa
pss...... say hi to Rose for me

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Mia Darlone

Thu 13th Dec 2007 13:06

Steve, I have no idea what you're referring to - making out that my poetry about a sacred stringed instrument has some sort of hidden sexual meaning - I'm very disappointed in you. And offended for that matter.
I shall be speaking to the chief executive to report your abuse.

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clarissa mckone

Wed 12th Dec 2007 17:03

well it had to be in America...lol this is funny. thanks for the funny

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clarissa mckone

Wed 12th Dec 2007 04:18

The more I read this one, the more I like it and understand it. You are so smart and you have a way with words.

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Steve OConnor

Tue 11th Dec 2007 21:27

Hello you.

Well, 'Let me be your cello'! That'll be a pleaser then.

I thought it was filthy. Really filthy.

In a good way.

Steve

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Steve OConnor

Tue 11th Dec 2007 21:20

'Familiarity seems a contemptuous song'

I like how you manage to suggest the original phrase whilst utterly avoiding it. Also, in the line that follows it. Very clever.

It's good to see that your work has a similar relentless rhythmic quality on the page/screen as it does hearing it. That and your obvious love of wordplay makes for enjoyable reading.

Good stuff, Pete.

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Paul F Blackburn

Tue 11th Dec 2007 12:56

Don't Worry Paul, I'm sure Santa won't get your present wrong! :)
Paul

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clarissa mckone

Tue 11th Dec 2007 12:44

This ones very nice Malcom

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clarissa mckone

Tue 11th Dec 2007 02:52

This is very good, seems full of thorns.seems full of bitterness. everyday life feels this way to me. no person needed. I think I need a good friend, I feel like I may freak out. but you have your own problems. to be free as a bird, that would be nice. great poem full of feelings.

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Mon 10th Dec 2007 21:03

Hi Phil, the 'alien' analogy is strong and provocative and strange -- unsettling and sad, too. It gives a real insight into the shock of finding your body is not entirely your own, that an illness has claimed a right to your life. Shocking indeed and the writing itself is an act of bravery.

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darren thomas

Mon 10th Dec 2007 17:38

Thanks for your comments about 'Craig'.
He was fed Viaga in the Far East and smuggled into the UK inside a consignment of walking sticks.
His name is of course a pseudonym. Or should that be, a psssssssssseudonym?
His sister Sharon doesn't appear to drink either. Temperance snakes - whatever next.
I like what is inside your head.

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darren thomas

Mon 10th Dec 2007 16:46

WOW!

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Mon 10th Dec 2007 11:08

What i especially like about this poem, and i like it v much, is that it is not 'laying any big message on us', that it exists as itself. That is one of the hardest things to learn, to let it speak for itself. We can slant and select to 'tidy up' a piece, but to contort it to what we want to say is most of our biggest blunders
All power to you!

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Mon 10th Dec 2007 07:17

they are good, Happy holidays

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Mon 10th Dec 2007 07:10

it's like a story told to each generation, like sitting on grandpa's lap and hearing about it. its very nice.
legendary in a way. i'm babbling on now.....

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Mon 10th Dec 2007 06:52

This poem made me smile! it is very good i really love the ending,lol. Happy Holidays

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clarissa mckone

Mon 10th Dec 2007 02:11

This is wonderful, I know it is a feeling deep within you, this pain oh Im sorry, I lived this too. xx Ill go life is too much at times

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clarissa mckone

Mon 10th Dec 2007 02:08

ah this is so good, Im havin a great night with the ex and his demon wife.so I take a break and read your poems. rolls of fat, well...stop the bread, cheese, pizza, beer, and the list goes on and on. at an autopsy, they cut men open and find,yeast...yes yeast.its a belly whopper. ah but you will never have this. you are perfect, im almost drunk...lol. its been a shit of a month. great poem, got me going! sorry

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Pete Crompton

Mon 10th Dec 2007 01:42

Very entertaining poetry. Refreshing. Racy. Pacy.
let's go go go for more.

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Pete Crompton

Mon 10th Dec 2007 01:19

I think you could condense this even more and it will be even more powerful

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Pete Crompton

Mon 10th Dec 2007 01:18

Phil, I like this style of poem and I like the metaphor. I think by making the subject more vague it allows a wider audience to access and interpret this. The alien inside is a good title too. I like the new style it is a step in a direction I can relate to and this new poem excites me.

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clarissa mckone

Sun 9th Dec 2007 23:52

LOL very good poem!

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Mia Darlone

Sun 9th Dec 2007 23:36

I am nothing short of fulfilled with merriment at receiving such a pleasant comment - many gleeful thanks to you. I am working on some clean poems to put up - most of them are for therapy and would probably have me arrested if they left my scribble book.

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Mia Darlone

Sun 9th Dec 2007 23:28

Many joyous thanks for your comment Monsieur Morgan.
I drink guiness too - except I put a shot of Tia Maria in it which generally unsettles people. I'll join you for one at Wigan if you're going.
Can't believe you know our lovely neighbours - it's a small old world.

Secret Agent Mia Darlone checking out.

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Sun 9th Dec 2007 18:17

Hi, thanks for introducing me to the site.

i like you're poem, 'Taboos' is a cute one.

the bit

'Then she would go and make a pot of tea.
And the end of the world was averted.'

made me giggle, reminds me of how my Mother-in-law reacts to pressure or stress

'make a cup of tea!'

:-)

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<Deleted User> (4249)

Sun 9th Dec 2007 17:07

Such depth of grief and sadness in so few weords. You have touched me (as well we know)

Tx

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clarissa mckone

Sun 9th Dec 2007 01:46

not sure how 2 got there
lol

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clarissa mckone

Sun 9th Dec 2007 01:45

Its a nice poem,Your emotion is there and has been all along. I need not say anything more for I know whats there inside.no need to thank, but its nice to hear from you.

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clarissa mckone

Sun 9th Dec 2007 01:45

Its a nice poem,Your emotion is there and has been all along. I need not say anything more for I know whats there inside.no need to thank, but its nice to hear from you.

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Dave Morgan

Fri 7th Dec 2007 17:01

Cellos and bikes
Bikes and Cellos
When it comes down to it
We're all fiddlers

Love the imagery
it does it for me Mia

Dave

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Malcolm Saunders

Fri 7th Dec 2007 10:18

Great. I love the poetry. Let's have some more.

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Malcolm Saunders

Thu 6th Dec 2007 09:48

Thanks for your performance at Dead Good Poets last night Dave. I really enjoyed it, as always.

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clarissa mckone

Thu 6th Dec 2007 03:47

this is very nice, Im not sure if I got it all. But it would be nice to have a little stone home there and a garden , some sheep and other animals, flowers and children playing..ah yes I can see it, not that big home in the picture. oh well I did enjoy reading your poem

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clarissa mckone

Thu 6th Dec 2007 03:44

WOW! This is amazing, they sure do sell fear very well, the mass of brain dead feed on it Peter. Some is real and some is not, I tell you Im so tired of trying to figure out whats truth and whats a lie...loved the poem. Happy Holidays! ;)

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clarissa mckone

Thu 6th Dec 2007 03:38

OH My this is rich, I really enjoyed reading this at times it was so sad and at other just to funny. great job. Happy Holidays! ;)

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clarissa mckone

Thu 6th Dec 2007 03:23

OMG ...ekkkkk! Well Dads are almost always right. Wow what a deal, so she had another boy friend all along?! Thats tragic. I did enjoy reading your poem seems so real life. Happy Holidays!

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clarissa mckone

Thu 6th Dec 2007 03:20

This is so wonderful! I feel the same way in winter. I guess I need the sun. At times I think it would be nice to be a bear and sleep all winter long. I really enjoyed your poem Melissa and Happy Holidays to you! ;)

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clarissa mckone

Thu 6th Dec 2007 03:16

this is great, reminds me of my drive to work everyday that takes an hour. I really hate it. but soon wont have to deal with it, the corps just anounced mass lay-offs, aprox 2-3000 of us across the USA. So ...wow love the poem, its so real. I know people dont think like me, but if you leave a little early, put some tunes on and just relax and say Im going to get there in one piece and on time, it really works for the most part.oh god cold calling..ekkkk hated it. nice poem Peter.

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Pete Crompton

Thu 6th Dec 2007 03:11

I'm spending time at the moment typing streams in order to find material to use in poems.

This one was inspired by a recent drive home on the M62

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