always good to read your work zach, it breaks up the monotony
i need audio of this to be played over a loudspeaker in a motel room adjacent to mine. i think that is the best way to digest your words
Comment is about rant 2 (01/23/2019) rework (blog)
Original item by Zach Dafoe
Big Sal
Wed 23rd Jan 2019 15:57
Beautiful, non-pretentious, and deserving of being read much more widely.
Loved this piece.???
Comment is about Rose Colored Reality (blog)
Original item by Vautaw
Big Sal
Wed 23rd Jan 2019 15:56
Evocative of several introspective thought processes, all leading to the same release valve.??
Comment is about rant 2 (01/23/2019) rework (blog)
Original item by Zach Dafoe
I’ve made a video with an electronic mix of this poem now (it only took me 3 months!) You can watch it here https://youtu.be/uepRXd6EYH4 I changed the title to Fix The Climate, thinking it sounds more positive.
Comment is about Nothing else matters (blog)
Original item by Tim Ellis
K.J.
God knows how you managed to produce such an epic, but I got totally embroiled in it.
The Smegroyds are a dysfunctional family of losers and cadgers, but you can't help but be smitten by them !
I loved it.
Comment is about kJ Walker (poet profile)
Original item by kJ Walker
Shuchi,
A tragic tale of unrequited love.
An experience like that destroys your faith and trust in human nature.....but time is a great healer.
Well done.
Regards,
Dave
Comment is about Shuchi Batra (poet profile)
Original item by Shuchi Batra
Point taken bud.i was trying to be unimpressive as life often is.. but honesty means fuck all on here and if you can fake sincerity you'll get followers,. Upwards and onwards to dignity, ! Take care David.
Comment is about DRINKER (blog)
Original item by ray pool
It might be -3 where you are
And Boris yes he is quite a twat
Would you believe here it's 45 tomorrow?
And Po, that is bloody-well hot
I'll bet Boris's lover's real hot too
Renowned for her spin-doctoring around
She's blond and has Boris besotted
A hot one our Boris has found ?
Comment is about Boris is a New Man (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
Very funny. Original subject matter, handled with great humour.
Cheers Kevin
Comment is about Is there sex after death ? (blog)
Original item by David Gabriel Caplan
Oh my god.. your sample is one of the best depiction of the world where we all live in..
Comment is about David Gabriel Caplan (poet profile)
Original item by David Gabriel Caplan
such a brilliant work..
Comment is about Is there sex after death ? (blog)
Original item by David Gabriel Caplan
I can correlate with the emotions.. how the world has created stereotypes and how badly everyone pushes to fit everyone else.
Comment is about Deja Vu (blog)
Original item by Damon Blackery
Thanks Don. Perhaps there is still hope for me yet, 'though with my hang-ups I doubt it.
For example, I would rather donate a kidney to a sick pig than have to stand up and recite in front of an audience.
Many years ago one of my limericks came runner-up in an arts literary festival and I was sent an invitation to read it and collect my prize at the forthcoming awards ceremony. I almost shit myself just reading the letter. I wrote back something to the effect that due to my recent bout of Avian flu I was still radio-active. They forwarded the prize by post.
Comment is about Is there sex after death ? (blog)
Original item by David Gabriel Caplan
Tue 22nd Jan 2019 23:38
how long has it been since
you've seen your sons?
hahaha
Comment is about Jennifer Malden (poet profile)
Original item by Jennifer Malden
Tue 22nd Jan 2019 23:37
"keep your hair on"???
what the heck does that mean?
hahaha
Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
MC you now know 'bout three brothers
Who make looking at them us cringe
(Unfortunately one is still missing)
Embarrassed he's come off his hinge?
Sorry MC I got sidetracked
Was meaning to tell you 'bout another
Have you guessed what goes rhyming with 'tother'?
I've yet to scare you with their mother
I'm sorry there Po if you're nightmaring
But all creatures great/looking shit
Have equal opportunities of sharing
There place on WOL site, each one bit ?
Comment is about Golly Gosh Big Sal (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
Dave
I know how you feel about posting something controversial or P.U.
You feel anxious about what the comments might be as you scroll down to them. The important thing for me is being unconventional. This is how new ideas emerge. Stick to the safe and one stagnates.
Don
Comment is about Is there sex after death ? (blog)
Original item by David Gabriel Caplan
A mutual orgasm between
Two interlocking and both quite dead corpses
Is natural for two, six foot under
Just practising their underground courses ?
Comment is about Is there sex after death ? (blog)
Original item by David Gabriel Caplan
Thank you all for the kudos.
I always find it a bit nerve-wracking when I submit something a bit controversial and non P.C.
Dave
Comment is about Is there sex after death ? (blog)
Original item by David Gabriel Caplan
A resounding Hear ! Hear ! to that sentiment.
Comment is about JEAN MONNET (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Let me pose this question -
Which is preferable - assuming being tired has no eternal meaning...
An end without sex - OR
Sex without end? ?
Comment is about Is there sex after death ? (blog)
Original item by David Gabriel Caplan
Thanks Ray for the usual intelligent comment. How many meteors we have seen - especially in show business and sport. Often child stars too fall from grace when adults , which is sad. Can't be easy to suddenly find you've become a nonentity, and the trustee/parents often spend all the stardust, so there is nothing left when the rot sets in.
Jennifer
Comment is about A meteor (blog)
Original item by Jennifer Malden
Nice! When the kidnappings were going on in Italy I told my teenage sons, who were driving me mad for various reasons, that I would pay kidnappers to keep them! Just like your family.
Jennifer
Comment is about Silver Alert (blog)
Original item by d.knape
Really funny, and very original! Jennifer
Comment is about Is there sex after death ? (blog)
Original item by David Gabriel Caplan
Ten out of ten for originality David; impure speculation. A good example of humour slipping in through verse.
Ray
Comment is about Is there sex after death ? (blog)
Original item by David Gabriel Caplan
This is really well put, and I believe many of us can relate to this. I really like this poem.
Comment is about A Living Hell (blog)
Original item by Hazel ettridge
Lovely atmosphere. I fancy a pint now.
Comment is about A drinking man (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
Ssssick and awesome! ^^
Comment is about Is there sex after death ? (blog)
Original item by David Gabriel Caplan
Well good, I'd rather you won the lottery, but then I'd quite like to win it myself.
Although frankly Hazel, I think we've both got more chance of juggling soot.?
Comment is about A Living Hell (blog)
Original item by Hazel ettridge
If I had a relative who looked like that
I'd be a damn sight bolder
About leaving family behind
Without looking over my shoulder! ?
Comment is about Golly Gosh Big Sal (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
Visual and atmospheric John.
I could almost taste the Guinness !
(I had a weekend in Dublin a few months ago)
Comment is about A drinking man (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
I recall my beer-drinking days with affection. The music is a bit like
"meanderin' through the maudlin'" - (perhaps a good title for it!").
I like it but the words can stand alone in their own right as a very evocative vignette of its subject matter.
Cheers!
Comment is about A drinking man (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
Very droll - in keeping with your excellent previous contributions.
I will refrain from an old British admonition:
Keep your hair on!
Comment is about Silver Alert (blog)
Original item by d.knape
Sometimes I think there is a raised awareness of the fragility of consciences Hazel. What was acceptable in my parent's time would not be today, and we are all painfully aware now. Is that a good thing? More like a global karma at work I would say. If we were forced to kill our own food sources I think we would all wise up quickly. Meanwhile, let's protect indeed encourage allotments rather than building millions of homes.
A very honest poem thanks.
Ray
Comment is about A Living Hell (blog)
Original item by Hazel ettridge
Thanks mate, just, "Working The Angles."
Or am I?
Mwah haha haha ?
Comment is about Working The Angles (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Big Sal
Tue 22nd Jan 2019 13:58
I read this to some music and damn near cried.
??
Comment is about A drinking man (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
Big Sal
Tue 22nd Jan 2019 13:46
So, let me get this straight. . .
Just to iron things out a bit. . .
On this narrow path . . .
___________________________
Man that's cool how you pack all these proverbs into your work, and they ALL pertain to the same thing. That shit is harder to do than alliteration OR rhyming.
Hell yeah!?
Comment is about Working The Angles (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
thanks hazel. while i do like the rev of an engine, i can confirm its a sunbeam from the sun!
Comment is about the quiet room (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
Really love this. Great message, lovely tempo. Just makes me smile because it's so well written.
Comment is about A Fine Line between Living and Death (blog)
Original item by April Emmeline
Big Sal
Tue 22nd Jan 2019 13:02
A mind is a terrible thing to waste, but the thoughts within are always worth saving if they will aid a journey or two. >
Self-preservation is a universal need for animals, but the want to destroy is distinctly human (or simian). >
It takes more strength to build a bridge than it does to bring it down.
^^^?
Great poem, Hazel.
Comment is about A Living Hell (blog)
Original item by Hazel ettridge
Big Sal
Tue 22nd Jan 2019 12:59
Here's a tip for your rhyming, Don: Feel free to try it and see if it helps.
- When I come up with a rhyme or a line that is too good to not put into a poem, I always put the thought up line as the second line of the couplet.
The more powerful a rhyme is, the greater effect it has when ended upon.
For example:
"The blue walls and the blade will turn a soul to a sound,
The roof falls from the 'scape and burns a hole in the ground,"
OK so maybe this is not a good example, but my point is that the second line = "The roof falls. . ." is the one I wrote first, then I added the first line = "The blue walls . . ." Of course rhyming is subjective, but this device helps me when writing them.
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Comment is about Golly Gosh Big Sal (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
I really like this, Hazel. I can relate to it.
Comment is about A Living Hell (blog)
Original item by Hazel ettridge
Thanks, Jason. No I won't be taking my own life. I want to die in the same way I want to win the lottery - no real sense that it's going to happen.
Comment is about A Living Hell (blog)
Original item by Hazel ettridge
This is a poem. Thank you. Last two lines turned the whole thing around for me (or is the sunbeam a motor bike and I've got it all wrong?)
Comment is about the quiet room (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
I really like that poem, I just hope that you don't actually want to die today, or anytime soon because it seems like you have plenty to offer to the world.
Comment is about A Living Hell (blog)
Original item by Hazel ettridge
And once again, thank you. It's deeply appreciated ?
Comment is about Tears (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Thanks big Sal, much appreciated ?
Comment is about A Notion Of Love (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Big Sal
Wed 23rd Jan 2019 16:13
Reading this was like watching Carl Sandberg watch 'The Twilight Zone' in IMAX.
Great imagery, Alan. The lines form a verbal form of sfumato equally well as they haze the differentiation between the actual and the perceived.
Two thumbs up.??
(I love that last line too.)
Comment is about Watching the Eclipse (blog)
Original item by Alan Travis Braddock