just the mention of the word Ceasar reminds of the thirties film 'Little Ceasar'. I also like the undercover of mechanical seasons
Nice one Adam
Comment is about Ballad Of The Secret Diary (blog)
Original item by Adam Whitworth
A truly fabulous poem Beno I am sorry to have missed this one before. There is a real vivid richness about this one which I think would go down really well performed live.
A well deserved POTW. Congratulations
Comment is about Our Poem of the Week is ‘Scooter Club and the Lost Boys’ by Beno (article)
Original item by steve pottinger
Hi David,
I really appreciate your comments. Human frailty, I too have been the hunter and hunted. Escape is possible.. Some relationships are just toxic, yet each of the participants with another partner can be perfectly normal and happy.
A lifetime of experiences has taught me that there is always hope. We are the masters of our own destiny..it is about choices.
Interesting take on the word spear...a subconscious message perhaps. ?
Comment is about The Huntress (blog)
Original item by Taylor Crowshaw
Thanks Mr. Keith.
Much appreciation from the other side...
Comment is about Don't Say Goodbye (blog)
Original item by Kporho Raphael Oyeke
<Deleted User> (18980)
Tue 4th Dec 2018 07:56
My sleep pattern's a bit all over the place these days. Sometimes I wake up before I've even gone to bed! Take today for example...this is the earliest I've ever been late.
Comment is about Wake Up Brian. It's 7am (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
Brian he likes to be on top
When giving Brian-like quips
I'm sure he want's to do this
And still maintain his grip
He'll need to think and put his
UK neurons in action
Coz I have had all day to put
My Aussie ones in traction ?
Comment is about Wake Up Brian. It's 7am (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
I really enjoyed this David. I was born and brought up yards from the sea. I moved many years ago but always there is a yearning to return. ?
Comment is about NOT REALLY A STRANGER (blog)
Original item by David Subacchi
Like the poem D.K. but I am with Jennifer...not always the case..?
Comment is about The Longer You Live (blog)
Original item by d.knape
Interesting poem Keith like it a lot. Chasing a feeling of security and happiness with little understanding, but a good dollop of nostalgia..as always excellent poem.?
Comment is about The Non Event (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Too true Elle ?
Comment is about Be Careful What You Do For Love (blog)
Original item by Elle Shaine
Thanks guys as always. It was fun to try out the challenge of a new structure, but it's not quite there yet - I'm not happy with the ultimate message of the repeating lines. As you say Big Sal, I think these lines need to be really strong, and mine are not quite there. Like my Haiku, I'm still a beginner - but I'm really learning how practice makes...not perfect, but improvement at least!
Comment is about My first-born (blog)
Original item by Becky Who
Great poem - but not always true unfortunately. Italian drivers only stop at pedestrian crossings (sometimes) for old people, but always if you are pushing a pram! Safer to go around with an empty one.
Jennifer
Comment is about The Longer You Live (blog)
Original item by d.knape
Big Sal
Mon 3rd Dec 2018 20:19
Bluntly spoken but nicely done.?
Comment is about TO CHOOSE (blog)
Original item by Ciaran Cunningham
Big Sal
Mon 3rd Dec 2018 20:13
Big Sal
Mon 3rd Dec 2018 20:09
Beautiful piece evoking nostalgia and soft remorse with a twinge of closure.
Very well done, Hazel, I appreciated the message within.?
Comment is about Ghost 3 (blog)
Original item by Hazel Connelly
Congratulations, Randy
Comment is about The Write Out Loud Poem of the Week is ‘Confessions’ by Randy Horton (article)
Original item by steve pottinger
You can find more of my work on Write Out Loud and also on line simply by searching for DAVID SUBACCHI POET.
My 6th collection WHERE IS WALES? will be out in early 2019.
Comment is about NOT REALLY A STRANGER (blog)
Original item by David Subacchi
Thank you Kevin, idonthave a beard myself but may grow one in the future to see what the fuss is about
Comment is about The truth about people with beards (haiku) (blog)
Original item by dazzer
Congratulations. Keith
Comment is about The Write Out Loud Poem of the Week is ‘Confessions’ by Randy Horton (article)
Original item by steve pottinger
Thank you Jon and Keith. MC methinks thou doth protest too much. Take a look around London. Contrast west with east. There were 4.1 million children living in poverty in the UK in 2016-17. That’s 30 per cent of children, or 9 in a classroom of 30.
London is the area with the highest rates of child poverty in the country. You can see child poverty rates by local area by visiting End Child Poverty.
When kids grow up poor they miss out – and so do the rest of us. They miss out on the things most children take for granted: warm clothes, school trips, having friends over for tea. They do less well at school and earn less as adults.
Comment is about A judgement of conscience (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
Big Sal
Mon 3rd Dec 2018 15:38
Well done, Becky. As I'm sure you could tell by now, people on WOL love structure in their poems, and a villanelle is a perfect showcase of that. The repeating line must always be more powerful than the entirety of a haiku, and as brief as one too.
You did well with this, you should practice them more.?
Comment is about My first-born (blog)
Original item by Becky Who
Thanks Brian. I'd never thought of that comparison, but I'll take that as a huge compliment..cheers ?
Comment is about TO CHOOSE (blog)
Original item by Ciaran Cunningham
Big Sal
Mon 3rd Dec 2018 15:29
Nicely done again, Randy.?
Comment is about The Write Out Loud Poem of the Week is ‘Confessions’ by Randy Horton (article)
Original item by steve pottinger
<Deleted User> (18980)
Mon 3rd Dec 2018 15:16
This is your first post Ciaran? It's a good 'un!
Comparisons with Kipling's IF are obvious.
BTW welcome to WOL
Comment is about TO CHOOSE (blog)
Original item by Ciaran Cunningham
Highly commendable in its spirit, The grubby overcoat is in fitting opposition to the highly elaborate concepts of the poem and grounds it. The idea of death on the physical level is always the last option in any spiritual considerations. The last two verses are spot on.
Ray
Comment is about Gods et. (blog)
Original item by Alan Travis Braddock
Oh, wow, Randy. Fabulous poem.
Well done on PotW!
Comment is about The Write Out Loud Poem of the Week is ‘Confessions’ by Randy Horton (article)
Original item by steve pottinger
Brilliant psychology sculpted with words underpinned with insight and humour. Deliciously over the top and yet grounded at the end with a sense of futility. I laughed spontaneously.
Ray
Comment is about The Write Out Loud Poem of the Week is ‘Confessions’ by Randy Horton (article)
Original item by steve pottinger
<Deleted User> (18980)
Mon 3rd Dec 2018 14:36
Completely agree Knapey...though the one exception is my wife.
Comment is about The Longer You Live (blog)
Original item by d.knape
Thanks Anya for being LIKE and appreciating my poetry.
? GBU
Comment is about Bless Me (blog)
Original item by Suko Waspodo
Mon 3rd Dec 2018 12:23
A wallaby
a kangaroo
a boomerang
& Don Matthews
All of the above
are symbols of
a continent
that people love.
wink.
Comment is about Don Matthews (poet profile)
Original item by Don Matthews
Mon 3rd Dec 2018 12:17
cant tell what your two emoji's are.
either they are laughing or crying.
not sure which.
too small and
my eyes are bad.
if i squint they look
like me.
Comment is about Taylor Crowshaw (poet profile)
Original item by Taylor Crowshaw
Mon 3rd Dec 2018 12:15
liked your cat poem.
do you always talk on the banana?
try using a cell phone.
much handier.
if cats have hats
what's their excuse?
cats do have hats
blame Dr. Seuss
Comment is about Hazel ettridge (poet profile)
Original item by Hazel ettridge
Interesting how we see society today: as if we should feel "guilt" at
every turn. There can have been no time when poverty has been
so rare - except that the word has taken on a new definition and
dimension in today's materially wealthy world. Kindness is still out
there. Good will is still out there. Help is still out there. This small
country alone probably has more organisations to offer assistance
than any other in the world - and that often travels far beyond
these shores. It is rare to turn on the TV and not be confronted
with the latest "appeal" to help someone somewhere - or some
other cause in search of money to further its aims. And the response invariably exists. Many distant governments must be most grateful to the UK for underwriting their own greed and
incompetence. The old religious adherence may have given way
to a more flexible secular attitude but the inherent goodness and
generosity still exists. I know that to be true for a number of
reasons - not least from a personal perspective over many years
living and working in a great city.
Comment is about A judgement of conscience (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
Every country is entitled to the right to have laws that control who
enters it - and, logically, anyone attempting to force an entry or
otherwise bypassing those laws is subject to action necessary for
their implementation/enforcement. Criminal intent and the
spread of disease are but two obvious reasons for such laws and
their enforcement. It is no accident that there has been a notable
increase in serious diseases like TB accompanying the modern phenomena of mass human migration.
Comment is about A Human Crisis (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
Great poem - really enjoyed it.
Comment is about The Write Out Loud Poem of the Week is ‘Confessions’ by Randy Horton (article)
Original item by steve pottinger
Thank you so much Anya, I am glad you liked it!
I was actually thinking of my daughter when I wrote it - I have been shocked that so many young people are often so troubled and feel bad about themselves. However I think the general message can apply to most of us at one time or another.
Thanks again.
Comment is about Donor (blog)
Original item by Chris Bainbridge
Great stuff Randy, I really enjoy your ways with words! Hope to catch up again soon.
Comment is about The Write Out Loud Poem of the Week is ‘Confessions’ by Randy Horton (article)
Original item by steve pottinger
<Deleted User> (18980)
Mon 3rd Dec 2018 10:05
Don - 5000 people turning up at the gates of USA and knocking to come in does not sound like controlled legal immigration.
Yes they may all have a good reason for leaving Honduras, Guatamala etc, but if they genuinely need refuge don't forget they have all passed through at least one safe country to get to Tijuana.
And don't forget...USA does not have a PNG like Oz!
Comment is about A Human Crisis (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
<Deleted User> (18980)
Mon 3rd Dec 2018 09:57
Congratulations Randy
Comment is about The Write Out Loud Poem of the Week is ‘Confessions’ by Randy Horton (article)
Original item by steve pottinger
Another great poem Randy. You seem to have a unique and gifted ability to be quite tongue in cheek with well crafted poems. Congratulations for a well deserved POTW. See you soon
Martin
Comment is about The Write Out Loud Poem of the Week is ‘Confessions’ by Randy Horton (article)
Original item by steve pottinger
Thank you for the likes. This was an odd one.
Comment is about Pain or Suffering? (blog)
Original item by Hazel ettridge
Morning Randy. i enjoyed your poem as a start to the week - querky and tongue in cheek - though my bet is that we all fall into these mini-bear pits more often than we'd admit.
Peter T
Comment is about The Write Out Loud Poem of the Week is ‘Confessions’ by Randy Horton (article)
Original item by steve pottinger
When comparing US and Aus policy on immigrants we need to be be talking legal immigrants. Both countries allow these and I believe US is now beginning to do this but far too slow in Tijuana. I am not close to the situation and can only present the situation as I see it
Comment is about A Human Crisis (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
<Deleted User> (16837)
Mon 3rd Dec 2018 08:10
Very well written Noya..... being truthful about your feelings is good for oneself as well as for the other who could be waiting for u.... loved the way you framed it all...thanks for sharing!!!
Comment is about Disappointment (blog)
Original item by Noya
<Deleted User> (18980)
Mon 3rd Dec 2018 08:09
Don - what's your view on Trump's decision to deny them entry, bearing in mind your own stance on illegals entering Oz?
Comment is about A Human Crisis (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
<Deleted User> (16837)
Mon 3rd Dec 2018 07:57
thank you Noya for reading and appreciating my poem... ?
Comment is about Noya (poet profile)
Original item by Noya
Martin Elder
Tue 4th Dec 2018 10:39
I like this a lot Taylor. I think your poetry is going from strength to strength not only in format but in choice of subject which you really seem to get to grips with here. None of us like to be hunted and I am guessing that for some who are more vulnerable it can be a nightmare.
Nice one
Comment is about The Huntress (blog)
Original item by Taylor Crowshaw