seams were hacked at the Golden Dagger,

heaps left scabby by the running rills,

and the echoes of sweat rang out by day

at the ever pressing mills

(thats my favourite bit)

Comment is about THE WARREN HOUSE INN DARTMOOR (blog)

Original item by ray pool

a good one this ray. you paint a vivid picture of both night and day in the same place, and i felt i was sat at the bar as i read it!

Comment is about THE WARREN HOUSE INN DARTMOOR (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Stu, Vicki is right.

To me poetry allows me to break some rules that mainstream writers would perhaps scorn.

Use spellcheck if you can, accept critique without being churlish but never feel that you have to change your work because of it.

Makeup some words if they sound right (I do) it all adds to the mix.

Just get writing and chase the Muse

Comment is about Stu Burton (poet profile)

Original item by Stu Burton

Hi Stu - I don't feel I can offer advice as I'm still learning myself (& honestly struggle too sometimes!) but all I can do is tell you how I do things! I don't think spelling is important & if you're worried use a spellcheck (I do!) likewise with grammer - I try to write as I want the reader to read it. I've liked the pieces you've already posted - I think you have a good style. It's a brave thing that us creative types do - we bare our souls. Not everyone will like your words but if you own them wholeheartedly then what else matters!! Keep going - Vic xx

Comment is about Stu Burton (poet profile)

Original item by Stu Burton

Thanks Julie - I was worried it was a bit too self indulgent - hence the title! I'm glad you liked it xx

Comment is about Self Indulgent (blog)

Original item by Pixievic

Love this one.
My favorite line - surrounded by happiness built on the fragile foundations of youth.

Comment is about Self Indulgent (blog)

Original item by Pixievic

Whew! Glad to hear it! Well, then. You did great!

Comment is about The Dying Man (blog)

Original item by Smash Lee

I hope that I am analyzing this correctly - that this is a tribute to your childhood? The picture of toy soldiers stuck in my head, but by the time I got to the end, I was not sure!

Comment is about A box of mini soldiers, some dice and Sean Bean (blog)

Original item by David Addington

Beautiful. I loved everything about this!

Comment is about THE WARREN HOUSE INN DARTMOOR (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Thank you D! I like yours xx

Comment is about Trumpets, Burglars & Puddles (blog)

Original item by Pixievic

Thanks Denise xx

Comment is about Bravado (blog)

Original item by Pixievic

Thank you, much appreciated!

Comment is about My take on words of wisdom. (blog)

Original item by Stu Burton

I think we all do that! It's very good!

Comment is about My take on words of wisdom. (blog)

Original item by Stu Burton

Thanks Patrick just read The Smile that's what it did to my face.

Comment is about Patrick Rushe (poet profile)

Original item by Patrick Rushe

I think I would know this was you Andy even if it din't have your name attached to it. I love the lines
' picking money like nettles
wrapped in ripped hankies'
Nice one

Comment is about The Heaton Park Tunnel Mystery (blog)

Original item by Andy N

I like this Preeti - powerful x

Comment is about What (blog)

Not much more to say other than I liked it - a lot! X

Comment is about A visitor (blog)

Original item by Phil Ireland

Yes - a shiver - simple but to the point x

Comment is about After the flood in the Lakes (blog)

Original item by David Addington

I like the sentiment - and 'twilights harmony' nice x

Comment is about Worlds Apart (blog)

Original item by Smash Lee

It's from a scene from a movie. I was inspired to write about it. A man who lives in an old broken shed by the ocean is dying and sends his farewell letter in a bottle into the sea hoping that it'll reach the one he loves back home.

Comment is about The Dying Man (blog)

Original item by Smash Lee

THFC this afternoon JC. That was a load of poop too

Comment is about Poop Poem (blog)

Original item by Leorah Rohnaz

This my kind of poetry.

Comment is about Poop Poem (blog)

Original item by Leorah Rohnaz

Says it all. The brevity and the straight forward language (especially "Perpetual twilight") brings a shiver.

Comment is about After the flood in the Lakes (blog)

Original item by David Addington

A great write Steve. You've set the bar of quality very high for yourself.

Ken

Comment is about solitude (blog)

Original item by Steven Dark

Thaumaturgically Charged and andy n thank you so much for your lovely comments, the piece achieved its end. Thank you.

Comment is about solitude (blog)

Original item by Steven Dark

Those were my favorite lines, as well, especially the last two. I loved the visuals and the scents that arrived whilst I read this.

Comment is about A visitor (blog)

Original item by Phil Ireland

Thank you Adam, it is loosely based on the writings of John of the Cross a 16th century monk, mystic and poet and, hopefully, experience...thank you...

Comment is about Hermitage (blog)

Original item by Patrick Rushe

Powerful and moving words, although I'm sure there are a few references here I don't fully understand, i like this very much.

Comment is about Hermitage (blog)

Original item by Patrick Rushe

A captured moment in life...great poem...

Comment is about What (blog)

Loved the theme of fire and smoke woven through this...

Carrying, exuding
The scent of fires
Long since out.
Wood smoke smells
Where the words
Were kipperfied
By an ancient fire
Created from old trees
And a woodman’s saw.

Comment is about A visitor (blog)

Original item by Phil Ireland

A beautifully put predicament...

Comment is about Pure Panic (blog)

Original item by Nigel Astell

Hi Larisa, my apologies I haven't been on WOL for a long time. Sadly Jotspeak disappeared. Ah c'est la vie. And many many thanks for your comment.

Comment is about Once in every while (blog)

Original item by Steven Dark

Your work continues to keep us guessing and I wonder whether this is the real you or someone who speaks through the work itself.

Readers on WOL often make the wrong assumption on autobiographical writing, so I won't be drawn.

well done,

Graham

Comment is about What (blog)

I am left feeling revitalized! A wonderful piece, indeed!

Comment is about Bravado (blog)

Original item by Pixievic

I think that you wrapped up, being fed up, quite nicely. I love your style - a lot!

Comment is about Trumpets, Burglars & Puddles (blog)

Original item by Pixievic

Always an unwelcome visitor, but we don't half appreciate his pissing off for a while!

Comment is about Le Chien Noir (blog)

Original item by Pixievic

Thanks T - consider him muzzled for now!

Comment is about Le Chien Noir (blog)

Original item by Pixievic

Someone once said 'youth is wasted on the young'. How true dat! Love the sentiment expressed in this piece, well written young man.

Comment is about Young and wrinkly (blog)

Original item by Mark Mr T Thompson

its a good collection but it left me a bit cold in places i have to say, especially 'seance' which i remain clueless about. there's a fair bit of filler in there i think. just my opinion though.

Comment is about Don Paterson's 'graceful and moving' 40 Sonnets wins Costa poetry award (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Thanks for the comment on 'Who Are You' Patrick. Glad you liked it.

Comment is about Patrick Rushe (poet profile)

Original item by Patrick Rushe

This was titled perfectly... loved it.

Comment is about Moral Arrow from Crooked Bow (blog)

Original item by David Blake

I have so many questions but I think answers would ruin it. Need to read this one a couple more times.

Comment is about Be Mine Tonight (blog)

Thanks rob! Appreciate it. Gonna go through your stuff tomorrow , excited to read. We all have our cave. I'm actually trying to take a step out of mine and see if I can do my biz in the light of day, we'll see hah.

Comment is about Sick, Sweet, Dark Cave. (blog)

Original item by Corr Lens

What a wonderful sentiment! I particularly liked the opening four lines.

Comment is about Young and wrinkly (blog)

Original item by Mark Mr T Thompson

Thank you,MC. I can see that some might struggle without the audio.

Comment is about ODE TO JOHN THE HAT (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

I don't know why, but I am picturing an aging woman who has been ill, and you are trying to comfort her through her pain. I loved the imagery.

Comment is about It Feels So Far Away This Evening... (blog)

Original item by Tom

Full of imagination, and somehow hope... a beautiful concept.

Comment is about The Lighthouse (blog)

Original item by Tom

This sounds like a cry for help. I hope that you are ok!

Comment is about The Dying Man (blog)

Original item by Smash Lee

I had to read to the end... I really enjoyed this, and felt it was very poignant and real.

Comment is about So Easily Pleased (blog)

Original item by David Addington

An enjoyable read. I particularly liked the last 2 stanzas :)

Comment is about Reading Poetry (blog)

Original item by Patrick Rushe