Wed 6th Jan 2016 23:52
Great piece of writing...I enjoyed the story in it....
Comment is about A Strange Encounter (blog)
Original item by Pixievic
John,
What are you doin` to me ? I`ve just finished hurtin` me head about pictures and the written word, and now you`ve got me worryin` about sound and the written word.
I advise anyone who wants to savour the full value of this one to read it as they listen..it`s a corker!
Scouse would get nowhere near it.
Comment is about ODE TO JOHN THE HAT (blog)
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David,
So that`s where all those jerky, jack in the box fights in those Chinese films comes from.
Comment is about Fire Monkey (blog)
Original item by David Lindsay
Tom,
I wondered at first about this (estranging?) idea
of a light house looking back and forward, then realised that a lighthouse light circles.
It`s comforting somehow.
Comment is about The Lighthouse (blog)
Original item by Tom
Ray,
Hang on to that Ramsbottom Bickerdyke and co.
roll it around you tongue and savour it, it has a feel of future greatness about it. Start thinking humour in the style of the great Victorian monologues) I`m sure you could do it. :)
Comment is about RAMSBOTTOM BICKERDYKE AND Co (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Ian,
These descriptions of what (I presume) are individual photographs remind me of some thoughts I had once when we had a long - argumentative - thread about ` The Red Wheelbarrow` and imagist poetry.
I wondered afterwards why no one had brought up the idea of still life in painting as a reason for the imagist idea.
I tried to imagine each of the photographs you describe, but couldn`t get rid of the thought that the two types of representation are incompatible.
For instance your stanza four has the `active` terms fractured, exploding, strobes and cast which, I can well imagine, describe the effect the photography had on you yourself, but wonder if it really `conveys` the photography itself.
I`ve often noticed that a poem about a sunset which includes a coloured photograph usually loses hands down against even an ordinary picture.
As someone who`s actually had a go at trying it what do you think?
Comment is about Rich Pictures (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
Wed 6th Jan 2016 19:08
Loved this poem...
crocheted, closed for solar influence
Comment is about Village Gothic (blog)
Original item by David Blake
Thank you again - I like to play with words! And I like a reference to wine if I can get one in! xx
Comment is about Bravado (blog)
Original item by Pixievic
You put that so well! Captured perfectly. Thank you : )
Comment is about Nigel Astell (poet profile)
Original item by Nigel Astell
"twist with the corkscrew" imaginative play with words Vic. Tommy
Comment is about Bravado (blog)
Original item by Pixievic
agree with graham, no need for it. ruins the flow i think. having said that, I have used it in the past. i'm warming towards all lowercase more and more, in my mind it flows better.
this poem is good by the way!
Comment is about Just another cover up (blog)
Original item by David Addington
J Graham
Wed 6th Jan 2016 02:26
Excess baggage - my excess baggage is in a locked closet complete with unidentified boxes on shelves.
Interesting how we are parallel in thoughts.
Comment is about Pixievic (poet profile)
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J Graham
Wed 6th Jan 2016 02:19
I started reading strange encounter, and just like that I was hooked in to the encounter :)
Comment is about Pixievic (poet profile)
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J Graham
Wed 6th Jan 2016 02:14
wow!! really felt your poem "waiting to happen".
You have a way with words, making them come alive!
Comment is about Pixievic (poet profile)
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<Deleted User> (13947)
Tue 5th Jan 2016 23:31
Welcome to WOL. :) I am thrilled you are loving my words. I look forward to spending some time diving into yours xx
Comment is about Pixievic (poet profile)
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Thanks for the comments Graham - I'm gonna try to avoid this capital letter thingy me bob. It makes no sense like you say.
Comment is about Just another cover up (blog)
Original item by David Addington
Thanks for the comments Graham - I'm gonna try to avoid this capital letter thingy me bob. It makes no sense like you say.
Comment is about Just another cover up (blog)
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There are clearly times when we can all feel as lost as the people we went to help. This has been so eloquently put.
Comment is about The Lighthouse (blog)
Original item by Tom
Tue 5th Jan 2016 19:03
A poem (to me) of comparisons...I enjoyed this...
Comment is about The Lighthouse (blog)
Original item by Tom
This is a lovely a powerful piece about what morphine can do to people summed up in the lines
'you're falling into morphine warm and wide'
excellent
Comment is about Morphine (blog)
Original item by Tom
Thanks again Tommy for reading & commenting in your wonderfully unique & insighful way Xx
Comment is about Tommy Carroll (poet profile)
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Be warned indeed! Although I'm not adverse to being handled! Just with care!! X
Comment is about Waiting to Happen (blog)
Original item by Pixievic
Tue 5th Jan 2016 17:21
Told with great affection and a touch of wistfulness...I enjoyed this poem...
Comment is about Michael (blog)
Original item by Freda Davis
Thanks again Martin for liking the poem I left in the comments of 'school' - it was originally written as therapy but I quite like the way it turned out! I might be brave enough to blog it!
Comment is about Martin Elder (poet profile)
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Bewarned, for a woman who knows what was, is and will be must be handled with care for she may not wished to be handled. Tommy
Comment is about Waiting to Happen (blog)
Original item by Pixievic
Thanks Stu for your support. Always nice to have the input.
Comment is about SOME BRIGHT SPARK (blog)
Original item by ray pool
thanks very much for commenting on Black Christmas - really pleased that you liked it. As always, an insightful response, no mother would ever want her son down the pits - but, in an age when the stigma of the dole shamed hard working men from going on it, the mines were often the only alternative to earn a living - as many of my classmates found. Luckily, I didn't need to. Apologies for not responding sooner - I really must get my act together in 2016. Cheers
Ian
Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)
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thanks very much for commenting on Black Christmas - really pleased that you liked it. The profession is a hard one - and mothers would never want their sons to go down a mine - but, as I learned from school mates - sometimes that's all there was in order to make a living - at a time when there was a stigma to the alternative - being on the dole. Apologies for not responding sooner - I really must get my act together in 2016. Cheers
Ian
Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)
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thanks very much for commenting on Black Christmas - really pleased that you liked it. Apologies for not responding sooner - I really must get my act together in 2016. Cheers
Ian
Comment is about Martin Elder (poet profile)
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thanks very much for commenting on Black Christmas - really pleased that you liked it. I always understand what you're saying Cynthia - you hold a much respected place amongst the 'commentators' on WOL and I always feel I've learned from your insights.Apologies for not responding sooner - I really must get my act together in 2016. Cheers
Ian
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
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Tue 5th Jan 2016 15:10
After 40+ years of smoking I can see all of this...given up now...
Comment is about Blurred as Smoke (blog)
Original item by Pranav
Oh so horribly true - is an evil vice I can't shift! Well written x
Comment is about Blurred as Smoke (blog)
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Thank you Martin for reading & commenting on Freak! - I think we all hide behind disguises of one form or another xx
Comment is about Martin Elder (poet profile)
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Hello Harry - it is quite possible our own 'plane was an
Ilyushin...the name was popular then. You will certainly
have your own memories: I have mine. The sheer scale
of the city streets and their monuments; the impressive
large stores (in size) and their windows containing row
upon row of the SAME item; the Hermitage - and the Summer Palace (rebuilt from shattered walls upward in
a monumental feat of recreation "as was"; the foolish
woman in our Intourist coach crowd on a visit to the
latter who had the film torn from her camera (NO PHOTOGRAPHS ALLOWED!) by a machine-gun toting Red Guard; the view from the hotel room across the River
Neva where the cruiser Aurora (fired the shot that preceded the October revolution) lay moored; the visits
to the Kirov and the Russian State Circus...so much
crammed into a brief visit but the images and the
brief contacts with its people linger still. To add a note
of levity allied to just maybe some reality, my chum and
I would be sure to praise in v. loud tones the country
and its people when in the confines of our hotel accommodation. It may have helped us to wander
freely as we seemed to do when out and about. But
then again, we were never approached to test our
sympathies.
I think of my visit when reading the posts of those
who seem obsessed about our own "failings" - and I am reminded of the words "What do they know of
England who only England know?"
Comment is about LENINGRAD - a Cold War memory (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Aside from just being a dammed good poem I love the comparisons you make. I tried to write something similar myself a couple months back but it just didn't work. However this definitely does.
Comment is about Asylum (blog)
Original item by David Blake
J Graham
Tue 5th Jan 2016 11:06
J Graham
Tue 5th Jan 2016 02:18
M.C.
Your your story about the guy with the screwdriver takes me back fifty years to when - as a young E.C. member of my union I went as a Fraternal Delegate to post revolution Hungary (my first ever flight) the plane
was an IIyushin. The wing-tips moved that much that it seemed we were flying like a bird
During a stop in Brussels we came back to the plane and saw the pilot sitting on the steps looking so worried that we nearly didn`t carry on.
Hungary - at that time - was enough to put anyone off being a communist for life. (I could write a book about the delegation)
Leningrad at that time must have been quite an experience.
Comment is about LENINGRAD - a Cold War memory (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Oh dear - did you make it to the end?! Hope I haven't offended your sensitive nature Tommy xx
Comment is about Trumpets, Burglars & Puddles (blog)
Original item by Pixievic
I nearly fainted when it came to 'Spunk trumpets '
Comment is about Trumpets, Burglars & Puddles (blog)
Original item by Pixievic
made me chuckle then think. a good response!
Comment is about SOME BRIGHT SPARK (blog)
Original item by ray pool
i like this. simple and catchy and it tells me a lot in a few words.
Comment is about I fell in love with a noun (blog)
Original item by Leorah Rohnaz
Ian Whiteley
Wed 6th Jan 2016 23:57
aye up Harry
I'll add these comments to the blog 'Rich Pictures' too - as it may prompt more discussion.
As you say - it's a tough one to describe images that the reader can't see, which is why I love the opportunity on WOL to include an image with the words - not always necessary - but it can help understanding.
This piece is part of a collaboration between the photographer (Richard Nixon) and 3 poets - myself, Laura Taylor and John Togher. We are using (Mainly) black and white source photographs that strike a chord with each os us individually. In the main we are being either descriptive or relaying how the image makes us feel.
This poem was my attempt to capture what the whole experience meant to me - and the thing that strikes me about Richard's pictures are the way he manipulates light with organic and inorganic subject matter - and his use of 'soft' shapes and 'hard' lines and angles. Because of this there will be some conflict in my own use of language, because it encompasses the whole, rather than any one image (Hope that makes sense).
For anyone interested, type the words 'Richpix' in the tag search field and all the pieces we have done so far should magically appear. That may give a better idea as to why summarising the whole project this way throws up conflicting imagery in the words (I hope).
Thanks for the kind comments - I appreciate it as always
Ian
Comment is about Harry O`N eill (poet profile)
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