Thanks Vicky and Stu. So glad you liked this - as usual I sweated over it and tried to make it a bit romantic!
Appreciate your comments.
Ray
Comment is about THE MUSE (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Lady Denyse
Sat 9th Jan 2016 19:11
Sounds as if you have had incessant nightmares?
Comment is about the sounds of the night (blog)
Original item by Maddie Cunnings
Sat 9th Jan 2016 18:49
Thank you for your comments...the poem came about whilst reading a poem and realising where one line or a word was actually taking me...
Comment is about Reading Poetry (blog)
Original item by Patrick Rushe
Nicely done.
The night has a lot of wonderful sounds too that would be drowned-out by daytime sounds, but that's another poem.
Comment is about the sounds of the night (blog)
Original item by Maddie Cunnings
Thanks Denise & Colin - little bugger eh?!
Comment is about Le Chien Noir (blog)
Original item by Pixievic
Tha's few that can affect
A line of dialect
So no wun would suspect
Its pedigree
But for sheer bluddy cheek
You have no need to seek
Much further that a sneak
At our JC...!
I took Harry's advice and read as I listened. Top stuff!
Comment is about ODE TO JOHN THE HAT (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
An essential truth, often overlooked - and pleasingly
evoked in these lines.
How many instances there be: occasionally but lovingly
misspelt or misquoted.
"Half a league, half a league, half a league onward..."
"I must go down to the seas again, to the lonely sea
and the sky..."
"Shall I compare thee to a summer's day?"
The list is etched in time and we are all sure to have our
own favourites.
Comment is about Reading Poetry (blog)
Original item by Patrick Rushe
Lady Denyse
Sat 9th Jan 2016 14:47
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Sat 9th Jan 2016 14:46
Only 40? He's a lightweight!
Comment is about Don Paterson's 'graceful and moving' 40 Sonnets wins Costa poetry award (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Wow! I love this can't really add anything more to what Stu said - it's perfect!
Comment is about THE MUSE (blog)
Original item by ray pool
i love this ray. the first two lines are so sweetly sung, and the structure is brilliant. then 'go hand in hand down a scented aisle in a marriage of sweet infusion' is just excellent. a really killer three lines to end the first verse. the tapering of the final verse sits well with its 'twisting' subject matter. excellent.
Comment is about THE MUSE (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Nice brief yet effecive poem Katy...lovely poem
Comment is about Residual Haunting (blog)
Original item by Katy Megan
Great memories in here...can relate well to this although I bloody hated football unlike my brother who always had it on while waiting for mum and dad to ring him for a lift home from the labour club lol .
Comment is about Any Winter Saturday In Nineteen Seventy (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
lilly humble
Sat 9th Jan 2016 00:15
Many fascinating poems, I am astounded how wonderfully these are written. I am pondering to post my own poems, because of your beautiful work. I hope you update soon, please do
Comment is about Daisy Lancaster (poet profile)
Original item by Daisy Lancaster
An alter ego at work! The hope drills down to look for a rich vein. That line The falling years..... is excellent, a nice twist.
Ray
Comment is about Tomorrow's Freedom (blog)
Original item by David Blake
Fri 8th Jan 2016 15:52
Thank you Ray...my intention was to try to make desolate and bleak as death is...thank you...
Comment is about Death (blog)
Original item by Patrick Rushe
Is it?
Sometimes we reflect certain ideas we may not reach a consensus on with others. In poetry we are not supposed to buy the idea.But appreciate it if we must we have to do so.
The point is conveying a message in an interesting or creative manner.Poetry is all about bringing something new or giving something already there a fresh touch!
Any ways I have got positive response for this poetry on www.poetfreak.com ,www.hellopoetry.com and www.allpoetry.com
Thank you for the positive feedback.
Comment is about What a dialogue ! (blog)
Original item by Alem Hailu G/Kristos
J Graham
Fri 8th Jan 2016 13:04
So inspiringly beautiful :)
I always love reading your art.
Comment is about Bravado (blog)
Original item by Pixievic
A nice desolate feel, and in short disconsolate lines. This has hit a spot for me. It has a bleakness that feels right.
Ray
Comment is about Death (blog)
Original item by Patrick Rushe
Thanks for appreciating The Death of Sweets, Patrick. Just a minor rant but I avoid those artificial tastes that are concocted in some tainted laboratory !!
Ray
Comment is about Patrick Rushe (poet profile)
Original item by Patrick Rushe
Lady Denyse
Thu 7th Jan 2016 22:54
Thank you Vicki and Lady Denyse!
It really means a lot to receive feedback.
Nice one and happy new year to you both.
xxx
Comment is about Salute (blog)
Original item by Noetic-fret!
Hi Patrick Thanks for comment on Osmium.
Comment is about Patrick Rushe (poet profile)
Original item by Patrick Rushe
Thu 7th Jan 2016 13:54
This made me smile...I'm glad somebody put it on paper things like sweets have changed drastically...
THEY'VE FILLED HIM
FULL OF GLUCOSE SYRUP
FRUCTOSE WHY BUT THERE IT IS
HE WAS SUGARY ENOUGH
NOW BERTIE'S GONE OFF
MY FAVOURITES LIST
loved these lines...
Comment is about THE DEATH OF SWEETS (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Thu 7th Jan 2016 13:51
Thank you for your comment...it was a simple little poem. I have a roof garden which gives me lots of inspiration...
Comment is about A Winter Garden (blog)
Original item by Patrick Rushe
Is this four people or just one person musing over a pint I wonder?
Comment is about The Mountain Poet (blog)
Original item by Corr Lens
I love the idea of marrying taste to a form of value and that tastes change as we get older (and wiser), much like tastebuds throughout maturation and beyond. Nice concept Corr.
Comment is about Eat it (blog)
Original item by Corr Lens
Haha no Tommy - I'm quite polite really!! But who knew tattoos could be used as weapons!
Comment is about A Strange Encounter (blog)
Original item by Pixievic
Corr,
I'm still reading through your work on here, but I must comment about this piece while the thought is fresh.
This made me feel like I do when on the edge of sleep; when thoughts disassemble and mingle together in no particular order, but still seem to make some sense.
Your cave is your writing room (I saw the spoiler!), mine is the unlocked headspace.
Keep it going and I will keep reading!
Comment is about Sick, Sweet, Dark Cave. (blog)
Original item by Corr Lens
I was expecting you
to head-but him
then knee him in the groin,
I'm glad you didn't though.
Comment is about A Strange Encounter (blog)
Original item by Pixievic
I like this - very descriptive - each word stands alone well done x
Comment is about The Gone World Gone (Poem for a Dead Man) (blog)
Original item by David Staruh
Thank you LD! It was a funny experience!!
Comment is about A Strange Encounter (blog)
Original item by Pixievic
Great - I look forward to it!
Brilliant book that, I applaud your literary taste ;) Have you read the Border Trilogy? Great first two books but I found the third more than tricky.
I can see now where you've come from with this. What a joyful read over the festive period ha :D
And yes, felicitations backatcha :D
Wooo - exciting!
Comment is about this is the end (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
challenge accepted! i like that line too. i wrote this after i finished reading 'the road' by cormac mccarthy. a fine book indeed. yuletide felicitations. hope you had a great festive period. mine was exhausting. only a month until little buck #2 arrives. must catch up on sleep!
Comment is about this is the end (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
Lady Denyse
Thu 7th Jan 2016 11:15
I picture these flowers in repose, awaiting spring. Wonderful piece.
Comment is about A Winter Garden (blog)
Original item by Patrick Rushe
Lady Denyse
Thu 7th Jan 2016 11:10
Lady Denyse
Thu 7th Jan 2016 11:08
I found myself chuckling to the very end... Good for you!
Comment is about A Strange Encounter (blog)
Original item by Pixievic
Lady Denyse
Thu 7th Jan 2016 11:05
"Out there,
Rainbows thrive by day,
While shooting stars
Light the night sky,
And warriors give up their lives...."
A powerful write.
Comment is about Salute (blog)
Original item by Noetic-fret!
Lady Denyse
Thu 7th Jan 2016 11:02
Fantastic.
Comment is about The Gone World Gone (Poem for a Dead Man) (blog)
Original item by David Staruh
A nice piece of bewitchery Harry to cull your term!
Quite romantic in a slightly seedy context, may I say?
Ray.
Comment is about Octolunes (blog)
Original item by Harry O`N eill
Good man, Harry. You're right, it has a dependable feel and is ripe for humour. Leave it with me!
Thanks for the input. Ray
Comment is about RAMSBOTTOM BICKERDYKE AND Co (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Thanks, Harry. I cn c owit mite bea bit UVA puzla without the mp3.
I've pinched the structure from Kipling; you might recognise "Din, Din, Din" etc.
Comment is about ODE TO JOHN THE HAT (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
There is one glorious line in this Stu that I think you could turn into a poem of its own. The imagery in this particular poem seems a little...haphazard and abstract.
The line I mean is this:
i kick through people’s lives like autumn leaves
I think this sums up us poets nicely ;)
Comment is about this is the end (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
Thank you for reading me Patrick & for your kind comments! It was truly a strange encounter!
Comment is about Patrick Rushe (poet profile)
Original item by Patrick Rushe
Enjoyed this, Matthew. I like the tone and mood you conjure up. I see you're from Swansea. This is reminiscent of the great man himself, in my view, in the poem's layout, and ambition of language. Thanks for posting it here.
Comment is about A Lifetime Of Nights In A Welsh Town (blog)
Original item by Matthew Jones
aye up Harry
I'll add these comments to the blog 'Rich Pictures' too - as it may prompt more discussion.
As you say - it's a tough one to describe images that the reader can't see, which is why I love the opportunity on WOL to include an image with the words - not always necessary - but it can help understanding.
This piece is part of a collaboration between the photographer (Richard Nixon) and 3 poets - myself, Laura Taylor and John Togher. We are using (Mainly) black and white source photographs that strike a chord with each of us individually. In the main we are being either descriptive or relaying how the image makes us feel.
This poem was my attempt to capture what the whole experience meant to me - and the thing that strikes me about Richard's pictures are the way he manipulates light with organic and inorganic subject matter - and his use of 'soft' shapes and 'hard' lines and angles. Because of this there will be some conflict in my own use of language, because it encompasses the whole, rather than any one image (Hope that makes sense).
For anyone interested, type the words 'Richpix' in the tag search field and all the pieces we have done so far should magically appear. That may give a better idea as to why summarising the whole project this way throws up conflicting imagery in the words (I hope).
Thanks for the kind comments - I appreciate it as always
Ian
Comment is about Rich Pictures (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
tommyfazz@yahoo.com
Sat 9th Jan 2016 19:40
Hi J, that canine has a bite that is worse than its bark and its bark is bad enough. Muzzle the dog. T.
Comment is about Le Chien Noir (blog)
Original item by Pixievic