Thanks Stu for your thoughtful comment and yes that line is this backdrop and the sabotaging brackets
Comment is about As I sit here smoking my cigarette (knowing I will never die) (blog)
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thanks for your lovely comment Robert . i think the brackets are something of a counter voice , but i do see what you mean . thanks again
Comment is about As I sit here smoking my cigarette (knowing I will never die) (blog)
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Thanks Vicki for taking the time to comment , glad it resonates and yes the brackets are exactly that
Comment is about As I sit here smoking my cigarette (knowing I will never die) (blog)
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These lines portray a humanity that travels in hope yet
acknowledges despair along our journey to "lights out".
They have a consistency in their content that is indicative
of a fertile imagination allied to an understanding of human
fears and hopes, and the poem is entirely appropriate for a New Year's Eve.
Comment is about NEW YEARS EVE (blog)
Original item by Ian Gant
Thank you Lynn for reading.
Comment is about brandon sproule (poet profile)
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I recall a line from long-ago biblical teachings to the effect
that it was sinful to hide one's light under a bushel - or
words to that effect, indicating that we should make the
most of whatever "gifts" we are given that reach out to
others. These lines allow for that whilst accepting the
ultimate solitary nature of creative thinking and the finality
of physical life as we know it - and the acceptance of
that reality without rancour.
Comment is about we live alone (blog)
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I don't do church anymore - I'm a 'recovering catholic' - I like this very much!!
Comment is about IN CHURCH (blog)
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I could use this as my mantra - I really enjoyed it & identify on all levels! I also agree with Stu I like the brackets - to me it's like my inner voice talking - you know the one you can't turn off but wish you could! Nice one xx
Comment is about As I sit here smoking my cigarette (knowing I will never die) (blog)
Original item by David R Mellor
Harry, I feel that a full conversion is overdue ....
thanks for commenting. Whatever is over there, I think those are human concepts!!
Stu, Don't bug me, man! The passing of wind is a good analogy and highly embarrassing for the deliverer no doubt. Is there humour in church ? Cynicism never bodes well for the aspirant.
Ray
Comment is about IN CHURCH (blog)
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It's so hard - but remember karma is a bitch & comes back to bite you hard!! One of my favourite quotes
If you sit by the river long enough, the bodies of you're minutes will come floating by
Xx
Comment is about Frustration (blog)
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i dont think we do! i hoped the scattered effect would show the scattershot thoughts and feelings associated with a quest for ones identity. thanks for reading!
Comment is about manifesto (blog)
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It's a wonderful picture you paint Ian - I do not have your age or wisdom but your sentiment is one I follow closely - I especially like the line
What better epitaph can a man leave than he understood hope as a friend ....
Lovely - hope the new year brings everything you hope for xx
Comment is about NEW YEARS EVE (blog)
Original item by Ian Gant
Do any of us really know? People make up their own minds we can only love ourselves & hope others follow our lead! The scattered layout is an interesting effect - I like it x
Comment is about manifesto (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
Very true - I try to not regret & 'live life to the full & to the brim' - lovely x
Comment is about we live alone (blog)
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Hi there stu
The environment was inspired mostly by the mad max universe, and fallout (see also the mad max universe ;) )
There are two giveaways:
The phrase 'big iron holstered on his hip" is from a Marty Robbins song 'big iron' that was featured in New Vegas, and also lead me into a two(?) day tequila soaked binge of 'Have Gun Will Travel.
The song is playing in my head as we speak.
Second, the title of Jack the Chaser from Anarchy Reigns, which is again a sci Fi western. A wreckless bounty hunter mostly motivated by revenge, he has a motherfucking chainsaw for an arm. A common theme in a lot of my sketches or writing is amputation, rewiring, rebuilding, home surgeries and stolen body parts--no matter what it takes to stay together until closure can be found.
The character in this particular piece has been resewn so many times the only thing left of his original form is his intent. I heavily romantisize that model of antihero, and I don't really like to think about what it might be saying about me
Comment is about Jack the Chaser (12/30/2015) (blog)
Original item by Zach Dafoe
Ray,
Tell me where your church is, quick! In mine they have a Guy nailed up on a wooden cross (he doesn`t look a bit happy)and every now and then a priest gets up on the pulpit and blissfully cushions me soothing little bits of information about Death, Judgement, Hell and Heaven.
Your place sounds much more amenable :)
Comment is about IN CHURCH (blog)
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Thanks very much for your kind and thoughtful comments.
Comment is about The View (blog)
Original item by David Lindsay
Hi Stu Thanks fpor kind comment on 'Ode to Cobalt'.
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ray i like your angry side. i call it 'red ray'. i am also enjoying these shorter pieces. the naughty word stands out like a fart in a silent sermon. excellent.
Comment is about IN CHURCH (blog)
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great piece. i disagree with robert (purely a personal choice however) and think the brackets add an important fractured backstory. the key line here is 'does she wish i was another'. so much said in so few words
Comment is about As I sit here smoking my cigarette (knowing I will never die) (blog)
Original item by David R Mellor
this is very reminscent of the gunslinger by stephen king. was it a source of inspiration? either way its a great piece. very evocative.
Comment is about Jack the Chaser (12/30/2015) (blog)
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Thu 31st Dec 2015 04:55
I very much enjoyed this. I've come to read it a few times in the last couple of days and have been hoping for some words to show up to express how much I liked it beyond 'i liked it' but sorry that's all I have. Like Lea has said it is beautiful :)
Comment is about bluelit 2 (12/23/2015) (blog)
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Lynn Hamilton
Thu 31st Dec 2015 02:29
Mr Sproule
You have such a distinctive way with words. Read each of your blogs which makes very good reading.
Mrs Hamilton
Comment is about brandon sproule (poet profile)
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I like this work on many levels, but I'm not sure on the bracketed passages - do they add enough to halt the flow, as they seem to in my mind?
Love the flavour of regret, and the false conviction in the quest to quit.
Comment is about As I sit here smoking my cigarette (knowing I will never die) (blog)
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Lynn Hamilton
Wed 30th Dec 2015 22:27
Thank you all for your comments on Lunacy. I must admit this is a result of brain damage, as a friend recently introduced me to Chambord and Prosecco! I do remember reading something about moons and thought - Oh go on then, I'll have a go at that. I did have to look through my fingers at what I had wrote the next day. Phew..... I may just have got away with it. Cheers all. xxx
Comment is about Lunacy (blog)
I like this very much - I too have a sideways point of view!
Comment is about strangers' meeting (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
I live in boots - comfort all the way! I like the disjointedness (if that's even a word!) of this, it works really well xx
Comment is about ...and a new pair of shoes (blog)
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Not sure Patrico of your purpose at a rhyming slag on my post but well done ... If you don't like please feel free not to comment
Happy new year
Comment is about Urgh.... (blog)
Original item by Ria Richardson
That`s not schmaltz John, that line eleven chimes too sadly upwards and downwards for it to be schmaltz.
Comment is about I DREAMT YOU WERE LITTLE AGAIN (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Many thanks for your kind comments, George. It is a strange time for dads in particular as they grow older and their interests move from playing with Daft Dad to clothes and make-up and boyfriends.
I was quite pleased with the way it's got a big cog in the last verse, Harry, moving out of rinky-dinky schmaltz to a more powerful plane. It seems to work well in performance with a bit of ham acting!
Comment is about I DREAMT YOU WERE LITTLE AGAIN (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Thanks for your comments guys.
Comment is about I Love You Mum (blog)
Original item by George Stanworth
That's a beautiful poem John. I have a daughter who is 4, and I am enjoying her sense of innocence, joy and wonder of the world. I get anxious thinking about her growing up, but know that all I can do is to be there when she needs me. Great poem.
Comment is about I DREAMT YOU WERE LITTLE AGAIN (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Thanks sir .Looking forward to it .
Comment is about Divya Rathod (poet profile)
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John,
What a lovely poem!
I`ve just been experimenting with the Limerick form for satire, and herè`s you demonstrating what can be done with it at the tender edge of poetry...it`s something - to me at least - of a revelation.
(I like the metrically canny way you`ve apostrophised the
you`re)
Regarding the top four...watch your back! (and again, will you sell us Kane?
Comment is about I DREAMT YOU WERE LITTLE AGAIN (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
so many things that are great in this, Stu. A cinema in Barnsley sets the scene of early exploration - the last line is a masterpiece of understatement and strikes the right chord of many a memory. This is just up my street: I could have written it myself - but I don't remember Tiffany alas... !
Comment is about tiffany (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
Their problems are a good bit easier to solve when they're kids, Graham. That's for sure!
So far, my pair haven't blessed me with grand kids but I live in hope they'll do so before too old to kick a football.
Top four? (Whisper it!)
Comment is about I DREAMT YOU WERE LITTLE AGAIN (blog)
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I can empathise with that for me it was 19 years it is the hardest experience to pick up and continue, but continue you must, find yourself worth. Coz you are worthy, :-) draw strength from family and friends. I'm sure you don't need me to tell you.:-)
Comment is about A Guide for Potenial Lovers (blog)
Original item by Pixievic
An awful lot of ladies joining at the moment. Hi Rose :-) Tommy
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Hi Madison, welcome. Tommy:-)
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Indeed! I'm sure we will
Comment is about Tommy Carroll (poet profile)
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Chutzpah! Lol I'm sure we'll get on. Tommy
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Wed 30th Dec 2015 10:50
thanks for reading me Vicki - I've been enjoying your work btw - I have plenty more on here if you care to take a look.
I noticed your uploaded photos - you might like to see mine: http://colsibabes.blogspot.co.uk/ - I like messing around combining words and images although I've been a little lost for words these past few weeks -
Comment is about Pixievic (poet profile)
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Thanks for reading & commenting on my 'Guide' Tommy - I can tell you have good technique!! I have been known to send this poem to potential dates!
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Good to hear Tommy! Maybe I should ask for references before agreeing to a date ....!!!
Comment is about A Guide for Potenial Lovers (blog)
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brandon sproule
Thu 31st Dec 2015 17:09
I'm in agreement with the proceeding comments.
Your New Years Eve piece is wonderful Ian.
Cheers.
Comment is about NEW YEARS EVE (blog)
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