The above poem is not meant to be a comment, just a poem that I have put in the wrong place...

Comment is about Patrick Rushe (poet profile)

Original item by Patrick Rushe

The Smile

Skeleton praise
For who I am
And what the pen will say.
I belong;
And belong in a different way.
Inherent,
From the outset,
Curling cold
From tongues that split
In shades
Of blue and ice to form
On lips whose root
Is from the scarred mind.
Oblivious to truth
And scattered liberalism
Flawed,
For freedom is in the freed mind
And not,
The acting out
Of freedom
But,
The journey
From the darkness
Through to Light.
Bitterness,
It seems,
Still reigns in liberated hearts
And packs a punch
In the smile that,
Behind,
Is filled with it.
Freedom,
Real freedom,
Is from the self
And in not the embrace
Of blindness…

Comment is about Patrick Rushe (poet profile)

Original item by Patrick Rushe

True...

Comment is about A Far Cry From (blog)

Original item by Alem Hailu G/Kristos

Thanks Martin I was trying for a cinematic style, and the ending is always key to that ! Ray

Comment is about SHE KNOWS HIS WANTS (blog)

Original item by ray pool

ginsberg yes! i love the beats, especially Kerouac. reading 'on the road' was quite a transformative event in my life.howl is wonderful, especially read live (harder to get on board on paper but live you get the sense more of the breathing and the rhythm of the piece). and yes, bukowski is a huge influence. he had the knack of being interesting enough that when he wrote about mundanity it became interesting. that is what we are all striving for in my view.

Comment is about Scarlet (poet profile)

Original item by Scarlet

At the York event there will be a sign-up list for poets to perform poems in solidarity. Free admission but there will be a donation bucket for the work of Amnesty International. Visit the Facebook page at https://www.facebook.com/events/1657068154532648/ for more details.

Comment is about Worldwide readings planned in support of Palestinian poet facing death sentence in Saudi Arabia (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

You are as always so very right. Yes, it is in essence throwing down the gauntlet, but one thrown down in sheer frustration at what the world desires at this time of year.

Complacency for world events, conformity in ones own understandings of governance. And a merry free for all with false blessings, outdated beliefs and a snide deceit upon each other that the fellowship of man is unbreakable and bonded in love.

It is absolute bulshit!

Now before I grab your hand and start reciting something about old acquaintances and all of that, I am off to do the one thing I am truly grateful for at this time of year. Getting Shitfaced.

Still, I hope one day the world becomes responsible for itself, not in mine or your lifetime i fear.

Happy Ones David.

Comment is about The Future Harvest (blog)

Original item by Noetic-fret!

Thanks Tommy - my mind is indeed like an attic - full of useless junk with the odd treasure hidden in the cobwebs! X

Comment is about Tommy Carroll (poet profile)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

Hi Martin, thanks for taking a look at 'Backwaters' and the kind comment. Pleased to know I still have 'it', whatever 'it' might be! :)

Comment is about Martin Elder (poet profile)

Original item by Martin Elder

Thanks for the kind comment on 'Backwaters' Stu. And keep up the good work yourself! ;)

Comment is about Stuart Buck (poet profile)

Original item by Stuart Buck

But now I shall unpack it
From the attic of my mind
Pull it out into the light
From the place it's been consigned

Sweet

Comment is about Pixievic (poet profile)

Original item by Pixievic

Thanks again Stu! I wrote a poem two years ago about 'Gold' and now I seem to be addicted to poems about metal. Probably something chemical they've put in the water.

Comment is about Stuart Buck (poet profile)

Original item by Stuart Buck

Made me laugh, Declan. Excellent.

Comment is about The Gap on the Bap (blog)

Original item by Declan Grimes

great poem Ray, its peaks of a race to me
'her pistons pulse she starts to purr' rounds it off nicely for me.

Comment is about SHE KNOWS HIS WANTS (blog)

Original item by ray pool

But, alas! there is... surely, you read the poem, sir?

Comment is about (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

There are some great lines her . particular the first two
'on some mute stale waste ground'

Comment is about Backwaters (blog)

Original item by David Blake

Thanks all for the unexpected praise here. David, I asked you to comment on this , and you did nothing that was not sincerely felt - and it made me think - can't be bad. I will try an update as it's a challenge. (post virus).

Lady Denyse, I particularly like to please a lady so thanks a lot.

Stu, We all like a good line when it comes! Sometimes, the opposite of the expected can be most effective ( I hope). Thanks a lot.

Comment is about SHE KNOWS HIS WANTS (blog)

Original item by ray pool

she lies, perfection on the ground.

that line is gold-dust. you should be proud of it.

great stuff as ever, whenever it was written.

Comment is about SHE KNOWS HIS WANTS (blog)

Original item by ray pool

I liked how you ended this. The whole piece speaks with perpetual motion; albeit, elements of darkness, but, I enjoyed it. ~Denise

Comment is about SHE KNOWS HIS WANTS (blog)

Original item by ray pool

I felt a chill, and a great release of emotion. Beautifully written.

Comment is about Backwaters (blog)

Original item by David Blake

Thanks so much for those detailed considerations. This was written about four years ago. I can see in the light of your comments that I was going from a tell tale style that had elements of humour, but a bit wandering and losing impact. Thanks , I'm glad you like the general idea - a bit weird but I hope I havn't lost that ingredient!!

I think simple and direct always wins with poetry.

I feel you're roaring ahead in your writing. Feet on the ground , head in the air type of thing!!

I'll give this another whirl in the current mindset.

Cheers David.

Comment is about SHE KNOWS HIS WANTS (blog)

Original item by ray pool

this is excellent. mysterious with a great use of language. 'nascent flames flicker' just rolls beautifully.

Comment is about Backwaters (blog)

Original item by David Blake

Thank you - and Tommy I'm trying!!!

Comment is about No Disguise (blog)

Original item by Pixievic

Thank You so much..J Graham for reading this..:)

Yes,we can relate that.I just wanted to redefine love,which is existing everywhere..:)

Ravi

Comment is about Happy New Year (blog)

Original item by Ravi Tanna

Enjoyed reading this :)

Comment is about No Disguise (blog)

Original item by Pixievic

I enjoyed reading this :)
Love the line about painting on the sea sand, we can all relate to that line.

Comment is about Happy New Year (blog)

Original item by Ravi Tanna

Strike while that iron is hot Vic

Comment is about No Disguise (blog)

Original item by Pixievic

Thanks for your appreciation J, for me trees never stop being beautiful what ever the season what ever their state. we need to make sure that we are good stewards of them all as well as the rest of the earth's resources.

Comment is about Trees (blog)

Original item by Martin Elder

Thanks for your comments guys much appreciated.

Comment is about The enemy (blog)

Original item by Martin Elder

You write well faerie X

Comment is about Scarlet (poet profile)

Original item by Scarlet

Thank you x

Comment is about A Kiss Farewell With No Regret (blog)

Original item by Pixievic

Oh my. Finally a living modern day poet who I can get on board with. I was beginning to give up hope. You are incredibly talented. We also appear to share some of the same influences (Plath and Bukowski) which may also be why I love your writing. I see some Ginsberg influence in there as well? Amazing. Thanks so much for sharing.

Comment is about Stuart Buck (poet profile)

Original item by Stuart Buck

A lovely piece.

And writing for particular people, for a particular occasion inspires me- as opposed to waffle for the sake of it!

(stands and applauds)

Comment is about Bon Voyage (blog)

Original item by Harry O`N eill

Beautiful

Comment is about Welcome Home (blog)

Original item by Smash Lee

just read jezebel. also brilliant. beautiful anger is hard to pull off. these 2 poems show you have succeeded. i look forward to reading more!

Comment is about Scarlet (poet profile)

Original item by Scarlet

'aftermath' is wonderful. i always judge a poem on how many lines i would like to steal from it. aftermath has 5. brilliant.

Comment is about Scarlet (poet profile)

Original item by Scarlet

I feel the kindness of strangers. Tommy

Comment is about Scarlet (poet profile)

Original item by Scarlet

Beautifully written and uplifting. A joy to read x

Comment is about A Kiss Farewell With No Regret (blog)

Original item by Pixievic

Ref: starting each line with a capital letter.

This is the biggest can of worms in the poetry sphere.

Personally I can't see the right in it. I think it's lazy and doesn't make sense. Others seem to have given it a credibility that I do not think it deserves, a sort of poetic license. Sadly on a word processor/computer it will occur automatically.

Either way it will draw lovers and haters

Comment is about Just another cover up (blog)

Original item by David Addington

i quite agree! i just finished a wonderful book called '7 brief lessons on physics' and have now started 'the quantum universe' by brian cox. quantum theory seems to require you to take as huge a leap of faith at the outset as religion!

Comment is about mechanics (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

Sounds perfect!! Only 6 bottles of vodka?! I love the lines -
smile at every opportunity to every one
Avoid everyone

Nice xx

Comment is about Hotel (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

Stu,
I`m doddering now, don`t condemn me to live for another 351 years :)

Oh for those happy, days of Newtonian equations when all was so beautifully and deterministically clear -before
those `orrible quantum guys got us all so particulatedly
lost in all those gluons and quarks and photons.

Judging by the scientists sense of bewilderment at the end of a recent quantum program, they seem to be in grave danger of delving into metaphysics via physics...If
so, where will we all be next?

I understand the sense with which you use the word `comprehend`, but a more important question for me is why any of us should be alive.

Comment is about mechanics (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

I'm trying to see what difference the structure of this poem makes.

I'd like to learn when and whether you should use capital letters at the start of all new lines, even if it is still the same clause / sentence.

What's the rule about this? Any feedback please.

Comment is about Just another cover up (blog)

Original item by David Addington

I agree, the enemy is often your own ego.
Well portrayed.

Comment is about The enemy (blog)

Original item by Martin Elder

Love your outlook on trees, I never looked at them in that specific way. I tend to look at them from a more general point of view admiring their beauty from far. I will now appreciate them a little more :)
Thank you!

Comment is about Trees (blog)

Original item by Martin Elder

There's a psychological truth in this - the enemy do exist in the material sense but must first be created in the minds and beliefs to be made real. (My opinion only).
In an international stage enemies can vary according to political expedience. It's all frightening stuff.

Ray

Comment is about The enemy (blog)

Original item by Martin Elder

You make peace with yourself
conflict has not been engaged
emotional forces have no choice
the enemy has to retreat.

Comment is about The enemy (blog)

Original item by Martin Elder

You take us into a world of a master who has not a slave but a goddess of love who stirs him to be aroused in this erotic sexual dream that no mere mortal can enter.

Comment is about The Temptation of St Anthony (blog)

Original item by Katy Megan

A pragmatic and workable solution to the meaning of the universe that we experience in the here and now!

Ray

Comment is about we live alone (blog)

Original item by joe ranter

Thanks for your input Vicki. I don't do church either, but weddings and christenings oblige us on the odd occasion.
Interesting that you have "lapsed" as they say. I suppose you couldn't confess this in the church itself - your membership having run out as it were. !

Comment is about IN CHURCH (blog)

Original item by ray pool