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Celia

Sat 12th Dec 2015 18:52

I enjoyed this. I hope you can lie in purple grass somewhere.

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Celia

Sat 12th Dec 2015 18:49

This is very touching, and the structure holds it together very well. It also deals with the difficult problem of how much reflection is necessary in life, when it leads to truth and when it prevents one from seeing it. The poem may suggest that the path is through reflection to where it's no longer necessary, and I'd agree with that.

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M.C. Newberry

Sat 12th Dec 2015 16:51

The world will survive and nature's truth that adaptability
is the secret of success will see it happen.

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Sat 12th Dec 2015 16:19

Hey Leah, a great write up of a great performer. Thank you.

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Shirley-Anne Kennedy

Sat 12th Dec 2015 12:29

Thanks Daniel. Chuffties :)

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Stu Buck

Sat 12th Dec 2015 12:23

nice haiku ian, even has the pivot line in the middle. so many 'haikus' ignore the rules, this becoming something else. although i suppose if we followed all the rules we'd all be writing about frogs and herons... anyway i digress. excellent and relevant.

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Nigel Astell

Sat 12th Dec 2015 08:35

Who is in Control?

High tech
computer machines
e-mails operate.

Mobile phones
text control
conversation limited.

It started
back in
the sixties.

When television
gave us
picture images.

Stronger airwaves
larger screens
channel selection.

We think
with the
remote control.

Pressing buttons
gives us
supreme power.

Watching within
our own
living boxes.

Human race
world audience
all programed.



The theme for Monday night is the sixties.

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Ged the Poet

Sat 12th Dec 2015 00:54

Captured visions of Lancastrian heritage.

Awakened by frost dressing rooftops
like a knocker-up tapping on glass.
Murmuring shades, ragged skeletal moths,
dancing slowly in hisses of gas light...

Well deserved. Nice one Shirley-Anne.

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Tim Ellis

Fri 11th Dec 2015 21:16

I love formal poetry Harry, but I find villanelles rather too repetitive usually, so this is one of a very few I've ever written.

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Tim Ellis

Fri 11th Dec 2015 21:01

I know the world needs a lot more than poems tonight, but here's another one anyway!

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oldlancsman

Fri 11th Dec 2015 18:42

Hi Harry thank you for your comment on Blessed are we I had no idea what a quadrain was until ten mins ago and I admit it would have been a far better presentation and I have taken your advice on board. have a nice day.

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John Coopey

Fri 11th Dec 2015 15:35

Interesting thoughts, MC.
The idea was prompted by something I heard on the wireless a couple of months ago. A woman was in exactly this situation and faced this dilemma. Ultimately she decided against but which of us could have cast a stone if she had decided otherwise.
A hypothetical question for almost all of us but very real for thousands of families.

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Harry O'Neill

Fri 11th Dec 2015 15:03

Chopra,
This terse style (which I call morse-code staccato sentencing style) is very understandable.

I keep getting the feeling that it could be adapted for some
sort of (urgent style?) modern poem.

Keep `em coming.

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Shirley-Anne Kennedy

Fri 11th Dec 2015 14:58

Thank you for your lovely words, Julian.

I a deeply touched and proud to be a member of the Write Out Loud team.

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Harry O'Neill

Fri 11th Dec 2015 14:46



Lovely, but why didn`t you put it into quatrains?

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Harry O'Neill

Fri 11th Dec 2015 14:43

Marksey,
A witty, cybernetic bounce around Biblicalia.

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Jackie Phillips

Fri 11th Dec 2015 14:30

Few words, strong on content - likey v much :-D

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Harry O'Neill

Fri 11th Dec 2015 14:22

An accomplished use of a poetic form in the service of your great global warning for us all Tim.

(My feet are now deservedly villanelled)

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Harry O'Neill

Fri 11th Dec 2015 14:11


Neat - and menacingly relevant - haiku Ian.

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Fri 11th Dec 2015 13:28

You are destined for great things, Shirley-Anne. this is a delightful, clever poem. I adore the last line, which takes me back...
We are proud to be associated with you.

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M.C. Newberry

Fri 11th Dec 2015 13:22

Always pleasing to know one's work pleases others.
It provides the incentive and inspiration to go on.
So - go on...and gain the pleasure of pleasing yourself in the process.

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M.C. Newberry

Fri 11th Dec 2015 13:16

An important issue that perhaps only a site like this - and a voice unafraid to ask - can address.
Parental love should never be associated with thoughts and
actions in keeping with pure sexual gratification by the
sexually aware. It seems somehow entirely logical that
such a scenario should meet no cries of outrage or
indignation if posed in a country like France - or even
Italy - where family is so much more than just a word.
In a less cruel world, such a lad ill-used by nature would
(no nod/wink intended) receive a helping hand from
others possessing an instinctive rapport allied to the
courage of human kindness in a society more advanced
than the destructive finger-pointing sort we have created.

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Celia

Fri 11th Dec 2015 12:27

Thank you Cynthia for your kind words. You pay me a real compliment. I think by 'traveller' I mean both that I don't know where home is, in a real as well as in an existential sense, and that I keep searching, and that I do so alongside other people, other travellers. Which, as you say, sometimes resolves itself in really travelling the world...

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Graham Sherwood

Fri 11th Dec 2015 10:45

I've just looked at my personal poetry blog and am astonished to find that I have written 64 poems this last year, double that of 2014.
Personally I think that is good going, perhaps a few too many.
I'm going to aim for better quality next year.

Graham

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Shirley-Anne Kennedy

Fri 11th Dec 2015 07:50

Thank you Joe and Write Out Loud :)

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Alem Hailu G/Kristos

Fri 11th Dec 2015 06:52

Thanks Lynn

On www.hellopoetry.com blog there is a corner for poets who have interest for the aforementioned tendency.They write things freely.No one contradicts them.By the same token they must not also be irritated when someone that doesn't buy their idea writes something that runs contrary to their interest,which has not yet got worldwide(dictionary) acceptance.

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joe kozarzewski

Fri 11th Dec 2015 04:31

Great poem Shirley, evocative of the misty, murky cradle of the industrial revolution !! It also harks back to a time when the factories were full of workers and the 'T' word hadn't destroyed our industrial base. I can feel the atmosphere, I have pictures, real and in my mind. I remember the gas lights, just about, and my mother working in a mill, just like dad did, with fatal consequences for him !!

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Erin O'Hara

Fri 11th Dec 2015 03:16

Ha love it!

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Jackie Phillips

Fri 11th Dec 2015 00:11

So short, so succinct, so thought provoking. A clever little poem which I liked very much.

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Jackie Phillips

Fri 11th Dec 2015 00:05

Thanks you so much, both of you for such positive feedback. It truly makes a difference to how I feel about my writing when others, who know the pains of trying to put things which are kind of indescribable, into words. Get what it is that I am trying to convey. Xx

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Harry O'Neill

Thu 10th Dec 2015 23:06

Charlotte,
In a complete (and movingly) contrast to your `Mothers Ramble` this is pure narrative. (and - in it`s way - just as poetically effective)

One is a kind of `the way you tell èm` the other a kind of `ỳou just have to re-state the facts`

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Lynn Hamilton

Thu 10th Dec 2015 22:58

Alem

My life is not ruled by god, the dictionary and my writing is perverse. Keep writing about what you feel is right.

Lynn

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Harry O'Neill

Thu 10th Dec 2015 22:55

Charlotte,

I somehow missed this.

I tried reading it as a short story, but It`s stanza form and first section of scene-setting, and second section primarily of dialogue makes it a very definite - and effective - poetic account of the an increasingly emerging problem of longevity.

I waffle on a bit about the effect of the novel on poetry and I wonder if this might be a good example. It is very what the theorists call `readerly` in that it compels the reader to follow what is being put down (and doesn`t use
any `difficult` metaphor)

I particularly liked the pathos of that last stanza.

It is a real attention-holder.

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Lynn Hamilton

Thu 10th Dec 2015 22:47

Thanks Ray. Words came easy but a very hard one to blog. Eddie Hazel - Maggot Brain. First listen, made me stand still, was compelled to find out more. Apparently, he was told to play like his mother had just died on this track. Second listen, Mr H is a genius and plays grief on his guitar. No words could ever express what he expresses on that track. Scribble went down as I listened second time round.

Lynn x

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raypool

Thu 10th Dec 2015 22:19

A hugely enjoyable trip, like a yearning to know the unknowable, an essential companion to an inquisitive mind. Lovely stuff Graham.
Ray

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oldlancsman

Thu 10th Dec 2015 19:10

Hiya Anita, Ive walked down memory lane a thousand fold and never tire, thank you for your comment and have a nice day.

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oldlancsman

Thu 10th Dec 2015 18:54

Thank you for the comment Stu

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oldlancsman

Thu 10th Dec 2015 18:49

Hiya J.J. Thank you for your comment always nice to hear pleasant remarks. have a nice day.

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oldlancsman

Thu 10th Dec 2015 18:33

hiya M.C. Nice to here from you again and glad you enjoyed my piece ,I will endevour to keep you amused. have a nice day.

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Erin O'Hara

Thu 10th Dec 2015 17:35

I connect to this very much. I feel you have a whimsical flow to your writing which I find endearing. I d love to read more!

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Katy Megan Hughes

Thu 10th Dec 2015 16:56

Aching indeed....

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Erin O'Hara

Thu 10th Dec 2015 16:00

So sad.

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Erin O'Hara

Thu 10th Dec 2015 15:51

Simple but I can relate to this. Should be a song.

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Erin O'Hara

Thu 10th Dec 2015 15:41

This is a promotional picture of me for "Cordaro World", a dance concert based on the artistic struggles of painter, Cordell Cordaro.

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David R Mellor

Thu 10th Dec 2015 14:39

thank you so much cathie , as you know being a writer can be lonely place and so heart warming that you like the poem

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David R Mellor

Thu 10th Dec 2015 14:36

thank you patricio (sorry for late reply) heart warming that you think so about the poem

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Alem Hailu G/Kristos

Thu 10th Dec 2015 14:25

Why do you consider the argument a slog ?

Writeoutloud.com is a platform for promoting readership and authorship of poetry and widening horizons of thinking.

We must not confine our attention to soft issue like romance as the saying goes "Candy is dandy but liquor is quicker!"
Why do you evade answering my question to the dictionary meaning of perversion?Does the 21th century beg for a new dictionary?

I have no intention of offending people.Far be it from me harming the feelings of others.

Referring dictionaries, show me a better rhyming word with some what an equivalent meaning.I am willing to learn.

If African leaders are found guilty of despotic acts by African courts, I see no reason why they should not be held accountable.By the same token leaders from developed countries must be held accountable for the blunders they commit.
The second stanza slams democracy in the east while the first democracy in the west.I tried to be fair.No complaint has come from the east in my poetryblogs on which I posted this poem.
I am not arguing for the sake of arguing.If new trends are coming we have to redefine words and terminologies.

The floor is open for discussion.I want to hear more advice.If I am wrong I am willing to be corrected.
I am not judgemental,for the judge is God the Almighty.

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M.C. Newberry

Thu 10th Dec 2015 13:48

The gratifyingly positive content - so refreshing when much
else can be negative - makes the occasional glitch in
spelling and punctuation virtually irrelevant...and certainly
so if read out loud.
Balm for the spirit. Thanks.

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Tim Ellis

Thu 10th Dec 2015 12:56

I like how you've put subtle variations into the repeated lines, and how those repeats contribute to the emotion of despair that permeates the poem. (Maybe "like" isn't the right word - it's well written is what I'my trying to say!)

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Stu Buck

Thu 10th Dec 2015 12:03

rarely get involved in these sort of tedious slogs so i will just post this and go about my day.

poem
[poh-uh m]
Spell Syllables
Examples Word Origin
noun
1.
a composition in verse, especially one that is characterized by a highly developed artistic form and by the use of heightened language and rhythm to express an intensely imaginative interpretation of the subject.
2.
composition that, though not in verse, is characterized by great beauty of language or expression:
a prose poem from the Scriptures; a symphonic poem.
3.
something having qualities that are suggestive of or likened to those of poetry:
Marcel, that chicken cacciatore was an absolute poem.

the above is not a poem. it is opinion piece delivered in order to evoke the very comments that i, sadly, am now participating in.

despite my limited knowledge of african politics (i am sure you know more having lived/living there) i do know that robert mugabe was responsible (or partly so) for the slaughter of tens of thousands of human beings. this does not mean, of course, that agreeing with one of his policies/ opinions makes you a fan of genoicde.

however, anyone who sees homosexuality as a perversion in the 21st century will come across deeply flawed to the vast majority of, shall we say, slightly more 'learned' people.

i respect your views on your country and your outlook on life but i'm afraid you must be prepared for the inevitable backlash when you post things online with the sole purpose of inciting negative feedback.

i'm fully aware that most people have an answer for everything nowadays, and that this comment is indeed an answer from myself. however, i will not be awaiting further comment on this piece, as i come to this site for poetry and feedback, not offensive Victorian outlooks.

merely my opinion mind you.

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